free will

07/2014

The balances were spinning

Out of control

Causing the gravity of life

To press my better judgment

 

The days weighed

Without ceasing

 

Bending my spine

To touch the thirsty ground

And snapping the cartilage

Of a better tomorrow

 

 

It was there

My life fragmentized

 

Cut down into the singularity

Of a drastic thought

 

I drank the blood

Of those who kill

 

 

Opening my mind to bliss

I died, I stood ashamed

In the eyes of heaven

As it bore naked

 

The darkest holes

The deepest of rifts

 

Not leaving me empty

But cleansing me with redemption

And restoring the tenderness of my youth,

Whispering with a love that shook me

 

 

This is only

A sequel

 

Through life

Your theme is written

 

The story

Is up to you

 

 

Author's Note

For when ye were the servants of sin, ye were free from righteousness. What fruit had ye then in those things whereof ye are now ashamed? For the end of those things is death. But now being made free from sin, and become servants to God, ye have your fruit unto holiness, and the end everlasting life. - Romans 6:20-22

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful use of words and description.
"Opening my mind to bliss
I died, I stood ashamed
In the eyes of heaven
As it bore naked"
The above lines. Strong statement, i could write a epic poem from. Thank you Joshua for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sophy Freebirds]

I like the closing lines bro... really!! The theme is written,the story is upto you.Yes we are not saved by our good works but by his grace..But after being saved also,,there is a question hanging!! Do we really go through this spiritual rebirth?? Do we pass the test.I liked the start - a balance were days overweighed. You tried but at last you gave in to the sin... the almighty redeemed you by his blood though you have drank the blood of sin.How ironical! ! How divine!! This is just so exquisite.My favourite piece of yours ;)

~Sophy

[joshua deathdealer]

Thank you. You really dug into the meaning and you found it. That means a lot.

[Sophy Freebirds]

:) its was a pleasure.. i liked it ..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think there is always rebirth in life...several times...we can always get up off the mat and survive when things get their worst, and we can be better from the experience. i like "snapping the cartilage"
brittle bones from absorbing the pain of failure....but we can get better...get better movement.

jacob

[joshua deathdealer]

I agree with you. Thank you Jacob.

[Aethereal]

This poem leads to many questions void of answers: Here’s a tiny gift poem for you to ponder:

Free Will?

Kill the will,
feel the thrill

May we choose
to lose
free will?
If we can’t
do we have
it still
since we’re forced
to bear
its chill?

Paradox is our guiding light
beyond the dark, beyond the bright,
beyond the wall that blocks our sight.

[joshua deathdealer]

Thank you! Paradox is our guiding light as it seems sometimes it is all we are left with. It in itself opens the door for thoughts. A wonderful and thoughtful review and poem. Thank you very much. ^^

[joshua deathdealer]

Ok.. I couldn't resist, to not review this one on the road, whilst I see all trees passing by my double sight right now, kind of a tunnel vision, looking at my screen... But this is a magical poem, filled with the need of traveling further, than life itself, reaching the borders of death's realm, I see blue and orange, your one leg and half body, entering the orange part, inferno intesamente... Quasi entrai... Ma sei, forte, il pensiero e forte, alzi quindi, conosci l'altro mondo... Pericoloso... Ma che bellissimo... You are the transmission. Your words are poetic gold to me...

- Elisa xx

[joshua deathdealer]

Your comment about life being unfinished in your review on the Kingdom actually inspired this one. Bring back memories of something whispered during moments of spiritual enlightenment during a time of breakdown after a long run away away from the truth and embracing the dangerous side of darkness. Which is utter hell for the soul. La vita è data per un motivo, per condizionare le nostre anime per l'eternità migliore. Attraverso vivere con uno spirito positivo e costante in pace ci viene data la possibilità di raccogliere i nostri sogni in questa vita e nell'eternità. E 'la legge di attrazione. Buone generò buoni. Generò male male. Thank so very much from the bottom of heart for knowing me. xx

Oh you mean it? wow. It is utter hell for the soul, I agree. Hai ragione, quando dici questo. Che bello quando parli così profondo. :) mi sempre fai felice amico mio. Come hai dormito?
And you are welcome, I try my best, to understand my dear friends xx :)

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

First, I love the font xD it's really pretty, second I didn't know there was going to be a song and it made me jump a little bit lol Anyway, I like the message within this...we have a choice in how we live our life, and even if we had a horrible past, we can have a brighter future, all we have to do is choose our path wisely.

Good Job

[joshua deathdealer]

Thank you very much. I actually took the song down because it caused the same for me. lol

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

You're welcome. xD and yay I'm not the only one lol kinda ironic that it made you jump though xD

[joshua deathdealer]

Well alone the song sounded great for it but since it takes a moment to load it throws it off so. Oh well. lol

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

lol oh yeah well that makes since, but I think that sometimes songs can distract the reader from the poem, at least it does for me anyway lol

[joshua deathdealer]

I think the same. It either adds or takes away from the poem. There isn't a happy medium. That's why I am very selective.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

Yeah exactly, I like the idea of having a song that may be similar to the poem that they can play after reading. But if it's just music you want it to play along while reading probably.