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07/2014

I am hated 

amongst the dunes

and

juniper trees

the ones that shine 

though pestilence 

amidst wrought 

and decay

I am clay

a child of the dust

and I am burnt

scarred of

my perception

laughing in front

of my face

and jutting into

dry sightless eyes

it becomes

a reminder 

of the darkened truth

that somehow remains

and leaves me

shaken

and

appalled

Reviews

Ah, I was waiting for this one buddy, I find it so deep. I feel a torn skin, my friend, (could be a metaphor for your inner pain, in this one)... drought, by the warmth of the sun, on your young reborn ashen skin. Not wanted to be embraced by the heat of the sun, the darkness is chosen in this piece... and the need to be forever there, shall not easily go away, for it's addictive, once one has been there. (I know nobody will probably understand what I say, except you). But that's enough for me ;) It's that goth thingy... lol so well done!

- Elisa

[Sophy Freebirds]

Shaken and appalled- the end is so gloomy. I know its hard for many.We all go through our darkest time. I liked the mention of clay- as being related to dust... we all are from dust and to dust we shall return. But God takes us through the fire of trials which makes us strong.. :) Nice write

~Sophy

[Sophy Freebirds]

Shaken and appalled- the end is so gloomy. I know its hard for many.We all go through our darkest time. I liked the mention of clay- as being related to dust... we all are from dust and to dust we shall return. But God takes us through the fire of trials which makes us strong.. :) Nice write

~Sophy

[Matching Socks]

I am hated
amongst the dunes

and
juniper trees

the ones that shine
though pestilence

This leaves me with feeling I had in school days when I was the "different thinker" ...
Not part of the circle of cheerleaders and football players...

(Until by fluke I dated the cpt of the team cuz I had to tutor him and I felt weird around everyone)
It's maybe not how it's intended but it gives me that feeling because of my own past experiences that someone is uncomfortable in the spot light and prefers to dance in the dark or the shadows.