star-crossed

04/2014

the way to one another 

is open 

energies entwined 

became the escape

   

we were poised to feel 

the pain that never came

mademoiselle 

with the smile that saved me

and the heart that grazed me

when you walk your secret shores

look for me in the waves

and feel me in the winds

find an ally in me

on the vanguard of war

Reviews

[Michelle N. H.]

There is an unseen cord that links you to the ones you love, and so you feel them on distance, as there is no true space between hearts. In times of anguish, one might escape into that and feel comfort, feel as one together, and not alone. I sense a wish to be found in someone else's core, although your roads may have been divided. I'd like to imagine the knot is tight, and you're with her still.. Stunning words, stunning execution.

[Muse]

Star crossed indeed! You so know how to woo the reader.

mademoiselle
with the smile that saved me
and the heart that grazed me



LUV IT

[joshua deathdealer]

Hey you know me. Gotta get em the web before you can eat em. Thanks Muse. I'm very glad you stopped by. I've missed you. xx

[Muse]

Missed you too. I've been away for too long.

[joshua deathdealer]

Riot time!! And this place needs it. lol Welcome back!

[Muse]

Of course! Too many newbies, we need to take back what is ours.

[joshua deathdealer]

That's what I'm screaming. I'm in such a blocking mood right now it's ridicules. Between newbies and drama I'm about ready to block myself.

[joshua deathdealer]

But we'll get it right.

[Muse]

I don't care anymore, which is why I disappeared for a year. I WANTED people here to forget about me....real life has enough of its own drama.

[joshua deathdealer]

That's exactly right. That's how I feel too. IDGAF I was away for a while as well but I did miss my friends and their work..I didn't think you were coming back to be honest. But yah. (:

[Muse]

To say I didn't care isn't 100% true. Like you, I did miss a few.

[Corset]

wonderful write, very romantic and tenderly written, such a sweet gentle reminder that you stand at the ready, in the waves in the wind, by your side, gorgeous write. :)

[Draven]

I feel this poem in my chest, the worlds you create in me as I read your poetry. Well done.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Brother, this is amazingly beautiful. I enjoyed reading every word. I love the imagery...and the pictures you painted in my mind. Every word fit together perfectly. The flow was amazing. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem. :)

[Zilla Z.]

This is extremely intense and beyond beautiful Joshua. You dance with words, as they bring you to other places of the mind. And they bring us readers there too. How romantic and pure.

"when you walk your secret shores
look for me in the waves
and feel me in the winds"

Such a beautiful stanza, I bet she will because the spirit of such
a rich and creative ghost you can't deny ;) he will be all wrapped around her.

Gorgeous penning...
Zilla

[Ian Faraway]

The first stanza threw me off. All the metaphor seemed to be crammed together. But the next stanza was definitely jam packed with image and I loved the flow of it. And the metaphor came in gentle waves. As for format, it kind of threw me off a little bit. My OCD sort of tried correcting it in my mind. Overall, I loved this piece! J'adore! -Ian

[joshua deathdealer]

Yes I had to do some editing to make the first stanza a little easier on the eyes. lol Thank you though for your honestly and I'm glad you connected with this poem. Truly. Thank you.

[Ian Faraway]

I see you fixed it. :) Looks a lot better! -Ian