total eclipse

09/2013

these words only cover the slits in my skin

holding me together all the while ripping me apart

flowing uncontrollably out of what remains

the lives left wrecked are a dark reminder

that I am unholy, fallen far from divinity 

no matter the leaps, disregarding the bounds

I am perpetually brought to my knees in tears

shattered down to drink truth from the Grail

to look into the very eyes of the Universe

to see the Garden given over to utter bleakness

as this ballad of life is lead to its requiem of death

ushered to understand how truly appalling I've become 

Reviews

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Joshua, wow you take my breath away. One of the highest compliments you can give a writer is I relate, I can feel each word. I think from these words your life is as upside down as mine. Unless you write fictionally but I don't think you do. I think you write from your heart as I do. But I get this.... Maybe too much

[joshua deathdealer]

Thank you Kim. Your 9 year old review means so much to me. I've always written from heart. My heart may not have always been in the right place.. but that's the beauty of writing. We get to write it out. Thanks for being here.

[Draven]

I know this feeling all too well, and all I know to do is write my way through it. I hope that you can find the light one day. Believe it or not, there is one somewhere.

[KimLove "The Beautiful Butterfly"]

It is hard to find the light for some. Im not speaking for Joshua, speaking for myself. That's why I felt this one so strongly.

[joshua deathdealer]

Life is a dark maze. A tempurement of the soul. Your very essence. The light eventually comes from you

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is how I feel about the human spirit overall. Despite the good we do, it really is all for not.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow this is almost like jesus in the garden of gethsemane...asking "why me? has god forsaken me?"

well, poets verge often on that cliff of despair...and then have to try to write their way out of it...

self-deprication here at its best.

very strong imagery.

[joshua deathdealer]

Such a strong beginning dear, as all is a theory of relativation... it seems. I felt the full moon in this one, you as well the character, on both knees, desperately brutal, as brilliant asking for some light, Some songs of life, are so sad, love, there is only death in their notes as breath, and I think that bullet you spoke of lately could fit here too... there is nothing so standard about this one, rather impressively artistic :D.... ;) ssssscrew the....you know who :D

- Elisa

[joshua deathdealer]

"...and when all the pretty blossoms had fallen from our branches, we found that we were one tree and not two." - Captain Corelli's Mandolin

Oh, my, you got what I intended... again... Penelope Cruz, as a greek goddess, and her Nicolas Cage... so greek so romantic, I cried when there was an earthquake, in the movie, and her father seemed to be death.... (that was the most brilliant sensitive part). And when he played her his mandoline.... of course, how could it not be... swooning away... hahah....

[Pax]

I am perpetually brought to my knees in tears
shattered down to drink truth from the Grail

~ that is really a powerful statement. In this piece Life in darkness comes with great truth. To understand everything in balance, you must have jump off both sides. But if you've start in the path to darkness, coming out is a hard task. This is really beatifully dark. I truly enjoyed reading such deep connection and its profoundness... Nice work!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Sometimes the shadows of the soul seem to block out all light, and we struggle to find our way in the dark. The image that you chose is a haunting reflection of your words, and I can feel the weight of oppression that pushes you down in the beautiful, deep-dark.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I love this poem, love. I could feel every emotion in this poem. The picture did fit nicely! You're one of my favorite writers! Keep writing love it. Thank you for sharing.