intersection

07/2012

                                         if I can conquer the darkness of a lifetime

                                        can I not reach beyond the stars in faith

and take a hold of the reins that guide 

all these untouchable things

                                         using my gifts within to shape a new day

                                        am I able to rebuild or is it just a waste

due to the strain of a mediocre life 

seemingly impossible to overcome 

                                                                     is that not doubt

Author's Note

"But when he asks, he must believe and not doubt,
because he who doubts is like a wave of the sea,
blown and tossed by the wind." James 1:6

Reviews

[Victorious]

Dear joshua deathdealer,

I like the first two lines because they are dramatic and like a paradox as they run parallel to one another. I wonder why it went downhill. How come you ended it in such frailty? It went from power to powerless, hope to doubt. Interesting, maybe you meant is that way. I read over and I ponder if the author has shaped the poem in the lines of his mind and the scripture, "being like a wave of the sea, blown and tossed by the wind." I wonder if the position of the stanza symbolize the sway.

However, this line, I do not understand, "and take a hold of the reins that guide all these untouchable things." These two I don't understand either, "using my gifts within to shape a new day/am I able to rebuild or is it just a waste." Or you know what maybe it's like a contemplation of wills. I don't know. That's my view.

Thanks for sharing!

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[joshua deathdealer]

This poem is the questioning of something that I already know is possible. Therefor the sway in the writing. In the end it is the scripture that reminds me that this is doubt. Thank you for your thought provoking reviews.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This speaks to me on so many levels...Thank you Joshua for sharing such a powerful piece. Well penned.

[dukovan]

The flow of the piece is much like waves. I like that you use "seemingly". There is some kind of hope in your awareness that it is "seemingly" mediocre. I don't doubt that you are fairly convinced by how very "seemingly" it may be, at times. I know its something we all go through and I've felt it too.
From what I've gathered in life is that hope pushes you into a direction, and doubt pushes you away....but faith is a rock that keeps you.

[joshua deathdealer]

I never thought of it that way but I do believe you are on to something. Thank you so much.

[olla]

and yet.. Thomas was honored to touch the wounds to assuage his doubt.. wisdom can be found in the pause one takes to doubt..

[joshua deathdealer]

That is so true. So very true.

[Lost in Wonderland]

such a true piece. (Doubt is common, but faith and God are stronger:) Loved this piece!