intersection

07/2012

                                         if I can conquer the darkness of a lifetime

                                        can I not reach beyond the stars in faith

and take a hold of the reins that guide 

all these untouchable things

                                         using my gifts within to shape a new day

                                        am I able to rebuild or is it just a waste

due to the strain of a mediocre life 

seemingly impossible to overcome 

                                                                     is that not doubt

Author's Note

"But when he asks, he must believe and not doubt,
because he who doubts is like a wave of the sea,
blown and tossed by the wind." James 1:6

Reviews

[Victorious]

Dear joshua deathdealer,

I like the first two lines because they are dramatic and like a paradox as they run parallel to one another. I wonder why it went downhill. How come you ended it in such frailty? It went from power to powerless, hope to doubt. Interesting, maybe you meant is that way. I read over and I ponder if the author has shaped the poem in the lines of his mind and the scripture, "being like a wave of the sea, blown and tossed by the wind." I wonder if the position of the stanza symbolize the sway.

However, this line, I do not understand, "and take a hold of the reins that guide all these untouchable things." These two I don't understand either, "using my gifts within to shape a new day/am I able to rebuild or is it just a waste." Or you know what maybe it's like a contemplation of wills. I don't know. That's my view.

Thanks for sharing!

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[joshua deathdealer]

This poem is the questioning of something that I already know is possible. Therefor the sway in the writing. In the end it is the scripture that reminds me that this is doubt. Thank you for your thought provoking reviews.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. You open the door to thoughts and questions. Faith is all we have sometimes. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[To be scene To be heard..]

amazing piece

[M.E.Lyle]

I think you're right, it is doubt. What great insightfulness put to pen.

[hopelessromantic]

i like it

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

It's natural for us to doubt, no matter what experiences we've had, because we've all had times where we've felt like God's not there. But I don't think that's doubt in God, I think thats just doubt in your strength. We all worry that we are not strong enough to do whatever it is we are called to do. Or maybe its just me, but anyway, I understand how you feel here.

[Raven Starhawk]

This is simply extraordinary. The form and cadence is flawless.

[Rhea752]

great job once more. i love your poems. keep writing!! :)

You must have seen first the deepest or darkest doom, before new things, can open in light, or will bloom. This one speaks to me so much! I loved it.
All the wonders, are thought out, yet natural be puzzled :)

E.L.

[Rusty]

Perfectly titled. A cataclysmic intersection of supernatural contemplation and exercise.