blinded

i took the i's out of this poem. it gives it a raggedy feel, i think, almost as though someone was gasping it out on their death bed.

don't know what

am sick of this

am nothingness

will be nothing

if do nothing

am stuck here

don't know this place as well as

thought.

 

 

 

Reviews

[deer-heart]

It's an interesting approach... it gives the poem a very raw feeling.