Endless Poem

Endless Poem

A Poem by Solitary_Streets
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free write, just wrote it last night along with three others, hope you like it feel free to comment

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As the drought

doubtful land rose

it rolled and

rolled

in elegant wraps


As people dream

of roads

and peasants

squirm in cages


Tender streets

nodded in rain

elegant thieves

shifted in sheets


The bashful west

Don’t you know

the stars are out?


The mad little stars

and…

at the end of my street

comes an…

endless poem.

© 2014 Solitary_Streets


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I'm going to aspire to be a peasant squirming in a cage, then I will not be unsuccessful; when I become more of a peasant on my own, I hope there will be people that I love, I will begin today. I will remember that that is what I have been always in truth and not glossy myself.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wonderful word choice, practically all-around, "Bashful west" was one of my favorites. The entire last two stanzas are wonderfully crafted to create a poetic image of a sunset. The first three stanzas, however, led me somewhere else that the last two stanzas don't follow, at least in my mind. Either more connection might help or pulling them into two different poems, perhaps, but right now it's not working together.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm going to aspire to be a peasant squirming in a cage, then I will not be unsuccessful; when I become more of a peasant on my own, I hope there will be people that I love, I will begin today. I will remember that that is what I have been always in truth and not glossy myself.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really loved the closing stanza, that is a place I know well and never could put it into words but you did it! wish I had wrote that! Clever and dare I say deep...I hate using that phrase but it applies in this case since I could never put it to words myself. Impressive!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Solitary_Streets

10 Years Ago

Hey thanks a lot! Its a place we all should know! I'm sure you could have written it but thanks for .. read more

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Added on December 3, 2014
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