Prayers

I pray to you to set me free,
as I sit beneath this oaken tree,
you are beautiful just now I see,
for with blindness god hath curséd me

Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

I loved how all 4 of these lines rhymed. The only real concern I have is the phrase "just now I see" in the third line. To me, it doesn't really make sense. I could be the only one but I have never seen an Oak Tree described as "oaken". Those are my only two concerns with this poem and it's probably just me who may have read it incorrectly. But I loved the rhyme and loved how short it was. Tom was right in saying that sometimes the shortest ones make the most impact.

[Tom]

Sometimes the shortest forms of expression make the most impact and this is no exception !

Deep, emotive and hits the spot, well done !

[Zero_Edge88]

Ah to what the waves in our heart tell us when we set free something we love? Do we feel a release or do we feel a burden latching onto us as a reminder that we should never do such thing. For our faith is tied to where we place our hearts. As to know that a prayer is a wish in our heart that we must set something free in order to know and open our eyes from a different perspective.

Deeply written and one can make different opinions of this piece. :)

[Lee Foreman]

Very Interesting piece....I love how the meaning behind this piece is in the eye of the beholder...Great write!!!

[Dr. Wood ?]

very clever write my friend

[Douglas White]

This is interesting because it gives a light refreshing feel to emotion, without belaboring or over-clarifying the intentions. Poetry doesn't have to be long-winded to be powerful, and this proves the point excellently.

[smilempsn]

Short and nice

[Sami Khalil]

I think god should be in capital letter. But as you like.
A very nice poem...:)

[CrochetRie]

I'm sitting here watching you play your video games, like kids do. Yet, every day you amaze me with your witty humor and now this clever poem. PAY ATTENTION! ;0 Love you, Kid!