Love's Silent Thoughts

All the things that we have been through

you should understand as I understand you

I can no longer hold my heart still

it desires to love you beyond imagination

I have grown accustomed to a mundane existence

constantly reminded of how we use to be

pleasant memories now bring forth pain

I want the woman I first fell in love with

the one who tantalized me with intelligence

your wit and charm was replaced with silence

our love now is like the remains of life

when humans pass away into spirit

leaving behind their skeleton remains

of what they use to be and what

you and I have finally evolved into

darkness has consumed our light

you and I might as well be strangers

with you constantly lost in facebook

and me waiting for you to have time for me

technology is initially to blame

it captivates us and blinds us to reality

but instead you chose old friends

from high school days now past

over me who is sitting right beside you

wishing we were holding hands

while making love between our sheets

these are my unspoken thoughts

whenever I say that I love you

you hear my words, but truly

you don't hear me

Reviews

[FireFly15]

I love this. Its full of passion and feeling. Typically I dont like longer poems bcuz they seem to drag on but you did it very well.

Excelent job, 100/100

[Dream Weaver]

I think this is tremendous, I've known this feeling, as do
many others. Great write Jordan...

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

passion evaporates through a window of pixels~ modern day love is as contrived as the windows opening and closing deleting and defriending~ what a bizzare sad little world where we dance with elusive fantasy instead of placing worth and effort into flesh and blood beloveds around us~ an odd phenomena ~ though not really all that odd when one factors in that humans like 'easy'~ windows are effortless to close~ a heart is not~ excellent poetic relating this era of disconnect between humans in actual 'relationships'~

[Don't find me]

i like this. i agree with the reviewer below me that maybe it could be broken up into the different ideas. though maybe this works for this piece. it seems like it burst out of you. full of emotion. well done.

[SJ]

I really like this!
Instead of writing as a big bloke, you could maybe break it up a little bit although with this piece it is quite affective!
Keep writing! :)