fragile

One evening shortly after the death of a very close friend of my family, I was thinking about the shortness of life. I was struck by the stark frailty of our human existence.

like a vapor, here and then gone
a sudden sigh, now one's passed on
life is so fragile, a smoky wisp
a passing shadow, an ocean's mist
turn of a page, blink of an eye
a drop in a pool, a flash 'cross the sky
only an instant, then they are through
gone so soon, like the kiss of dew

Reviews

[Ailee Way]

yeah, the imagery is beautiful. this is a bittersweet poem, i think, because it combines the sadness of the shortness of life along with a sense of reverence and love for that life. i think it really shows that this was inpired by something very deep and genuine, because it is so heartfelt, and i appreciate that you shared the surrounding circumstances with us. it makes it that much more meaningful. good job :)

[ABitBrokenPoetry]

i love the imagery here. amazing flow. short but speaks so much. & the title is perfect. life is fragile, short. brilliant write.

[BrightEyes]

this says so much in so few words - yet those words are packed with heartfelt emotion. I loved the brevity of life compared with the morning dew - so quickly gone. we do so often get caught up in the day to day and fail to appreciate all that we've been given. great write!

[Ms Jessica Renee]

The imagery through your words is superb.
Wonderfully written is this and I must admit, I enjoyed it enough to review it right now.
Bravo.

[Roy]

Great writing Jonny. Sucinct..great metaphors..flows nicely..deep.

[Coral]

I love the imagery and the similes in this piece. The rhyme scheme is simple and I like it. I think it's short but full of strong emotions on your view of death. I share them too.

[Emily B]

This is wonderful. Your words paint an image as delicate as a spider's web. You expressed your thoughts very well.

[Bubo]

You really have captured how fragile life is.......... A blink of an eye, kiss of dew, vapour, and felt this was very much mingled into nature and our earth.
Beautifully written and captivating in imagary.