This is awesome! Full of creativity and very well described. I love the meaning behind it to, I compleatly agree. This is a great poem, you wrote it perfectly :P
-Mariah
I love how creative this poem is, I loved "time only matters when I'm with you" but also loved "let this be the beginning and not the end". I hate when time runs out and love when it begins. Very well done!
Wow, this is really good. It seems really deep and thoughtful, like it came right from your heart. There are some really ingenious lines in here, and the ending is very clever... It leaves itself open, with options... A question is a good way to end. I feel like your last line really sums up your whole idea. "Don't rush your choice nor pick just one" is expressed throughout the poem, especially the end.
Time only matters when I’m with you,
And never hurts more than I’m used to.
It need not be every waking moment,
But in my life you’re the main component.
This was a great stanza, I really liked that one. You make some really great points in here, accompanied by phenomenal rhymes... "that wound time cannot mend" is definitely worth thinking about... A noteworthy poem, my friend. Keep it up!
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Thanks Mate, I truly appreciate the review. I really enjoyed my word choice in this piece as well.
12 Years Ago
You're quite welcome. Yeah, it was pretty good. :)
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