What Time is Good for You

As it passes us by lets take advantage of it

They say it heals all wounds and flies when you’re having fun,

Then why does it seem to drag on every time I go for a run.

I’m being told it’s running out,

So what’s this killing it all about?

Time is of the essence and cannot quit,

Now get up and  lets make the most of it.

A night out on the town,

Or just a day in the sun,

Don’t rush your choice nor pick just one.

Time only matters when I’m with you,

And never hurts more than I’m used to.

It need not be every waking moment,

But in my life you’re the main component.

Let this be the beginning and not the end,

For that wound time cannot mend.

And if it would help I’d make it stand still,

 So I’m sure Father Time would make do,

Now tell me, what time is good for you?

Reviews

[JiDonnelly]

Such a chillaxed' poem, Personally I like endings like this
Another beautiful read I have to say, I would love hearing it being said.
Sounds like a promised land for a very lucky individual.
Big ups'!

-JiDonnelly'

[That_Guy]

usually for me the ending makes the poem. I'm glad you liked it. we'll see ;) haha

[soliloquy]

This is inventive and simply excellent. This is your best!

[That_Guy]

Thank you very much, I really like this one too. I really appreciate your review

[soliloquy]

no problem...if it wasnt good then i would have ignored it....but i like the way disected something abstract like time and turned it into something really nice...

[That_Guy]

good to know. Thanks Mate, that's exactly what I wanted to do.

[K-mo]

This is really good, I really like it a lot

[That_Guy]

thank you very much I'm glad.

[K-mo]

I like the message in this piece:)

[Victoria Elizabeth]

Good job, daddy, i love it!

[That_Guy]

haha thanks sweetheart

[Victoria Elizabeth]

your welcome!

[That_Girl]

Aww. So cute.

[Victoria Elizabeth]

you know mommy, i dressed like a hobo today!!!

[That_Girl]

Don't follow in your mothers exs footsteps baby. lol

[Victoria Elizabeth]

i know lol,

[unshakenScene]

I loved this and this was really amazing!:)

[That_Guy]

Thank you. I'm glad ;)

[unshakenScene]

yupp

[KT]

Wow, that was amazing. When you read a poem that makes you visualize the imagery and the meanings behind the words, you know it's a good poem. The flow is great and the word choices work together soo well. Awesome work, man! Definitely putting this one in the library!

[That_Guy]

Awesome, thank you so much. I strive for that reaction when I really put forth effort in my writing.

[That_Guy]

This write has beautiful questions in it of reality, it really speaks to me.
Your lines as: "A night out on the town, Or just a day in the sun, Don’t rush your choice nor pick just one." and "If it would help I’d make it stand still, I’m sure Father Time would make do, So tell me, what time is good for you?" are really good. I will read more of you!

E.L.

[That_Guy]

Thank you. I really enjoyed writing this one.

[Wakeofahero]

Hey this is pretty good man. I like the part that says "Let this be the beginning and not the end" and where this finishes at, "So tell me, what time is good for you?" excellent flow, and message!.

[That_Guy]

thanks mate I appreciate it

[Cole Hayley]

A great piece. Very dark I must say, the first I've read from you. I'll be sure to read more.

[That_Guy]

Thanks mate I appreciate it

[KAOlmsted]

This is a very creative write, and, I am happy to say, did not waste mine...

[That_Guy]

thank you very much ;)

haha I'd hate to waste your time

[KAOlmsted]

...well, that would certainly make you unique *laugh*

[That_Guy]

one of a kind ;)