The Blue Moon

Inspired by last night's "Blue Moon"

You feel it first, anticipation building,

Waves lap hard against the shore,

The daylight dims yet the energy grows,

Then you see it peaking over the mountain.

The sun has set and yet your eyes are sharp,

This night you’ve become nocturnal.

No curfew this evening to stop you,

So tonight’s the night, embrace it.

Wolves will howl and the owls hoot, 

As we walk along our shared route.

I can’t help but feel though as we gaze, 

That she’s the one watching us amazed.

Opportunities like this can be rare,

An evening with someone for whom you care.

I can see it in your eyes that you are swoon,

Please let this be more than once in a Blue Moon.

Reviews

[True Henry]

You have a unique approach to your poetry from what I've read so far. My initial thought, for this particular piece, would have been another poem under the distasteful 'vampire/werewolf romance' genre. By seeing your name as the author, I'm led to believe otherwise, fortunately.

Your use in the last phrasing took me beyond the realm of the reality of the play. The unassuming desperation in the voice of the reader is summed up by the last phrase- "Please let this be more than once in a Blue Moon"- and it takes the meaning of this poem for me to a newer, almost metaphyscial level. Thank you- top marks indeed.

[That_Guy]

no sparkling vampires here Sir haha.

Thanks mate I get much more satisfaction out of my writing by adding a hook at the end, whether it make it personable or bringing the poem full circle. Once again though thank you very much for the kind review.

[TeeMarie91]

you are a very talented writer and I believe you will continue to be! Keep up the good work!!!

[NA]

To feel a lovers touch..once in a blue moon...love it :)

[Riley Mistwood]

very sweet. liked it alot

[Jo March]

this is beautiful, I love the regular rhyme scheme.

[That_Guy]

Thanks mate, I kept it simple ;)

[afra]

very beautiful and deep ....well done

[That_Guy]

Thank you Afra, I appreciate it ;)

[KJM]

I wasn't too sure what to expect, it was the title that drew me in. A side note, I think the cover to this could be made to better match your poem, and capture the feelings within it.

I thought that this was really good. The images this created were strong and vivid. And an entire story plays out before our eyes as we read this, despite the fact there are only four stanzas with four lines each.
I loved the wave like rhythm.

"The sun has set and yet your eyes are sharp/This night you’ve become nocturnal." These lines are the ones that really stand out to me, reminds me of adrenalin. Also reminds me of that wonderful feeling of freedom at night.

I really loved this, the end was sad, desperate in a way, and I felt reverence come through. It brings back memories of those moments that you wish could last forever.

[That_Guy]

You definitely seemed to have got what I tried to portray in this. I'm running late or I"d delve deeper in this review but I'll be back ;)

[kublakhan27]

I like how this challenges the long-standing association of night with death...I know what you mean about your best stuff coming after dark...most of my stuff comes between specifically midnight and 3am which is great except when I'm tired lol But when you gotta write, you gotta write, right? (Sorry, goofy night) This is one of my favourites from your catalogue to date^^

[That_Guy]

exactly thank Bro. See Kublakhan27 knows whats up

[kublakhan27]

Haha my pleasure^^

[Starlit Dhrub]

awwwww!!!!!!! very very very mesmerizing!!!!!!!!!!!

[That_Guy]

haha thank you

[Starlit Dhrub]

your welcome!!!

[Cole Hayley]

Wolves will howl and the owls hoot,
As we walk along our shared route.
I can’t help but feel though as we gaze,
That she’s the one watching us amazed.

Nice stanza man, your style is great.

[That_Guy]

Thanks Bro I appreciate that. Your style is great and unlike any others I've come across.