The Hooded Man

Death comes unexpectedly. =)

I was walking down the road

"You be careful", I was told

Nobody knows, even the bold

When one will be touched by the hand so cold.

 

"He's a hooded man

Sometimes he's there, sometimes he's gone.

He touches with a sword, sometimes with a gun

But he makes sure his work is done.

 

He's weak when there is hope

He's strong when you succumb to dope

When you are jubilant he says 'nope'

A joyous heart he can't cope

 

But you see he has his ways

Sometimes he leads you astray

It' harder to get you at day

So he waits until you're grey."

 

And so I said "I fear the name

Why such a reputation and fame?

Are we so lame

to be just pawns in his game?"

 

"Do not fear the name or shiver so low

He is neither friend nor foe

Just be prepared when the clock begins to slow

and Death comes and says 'it's time to go'."

Reviews

[Sir Joe]

I was already done typing my review on this poem when, suddenly, an error occurred on this web page. It was lengthy, so I was like "wtf?". Hai!!!! Now I have to recall everything that I've poured into that review.

I've always been fascinated by writers who craft their works with so much restrictions. This poem of yours adheres much to the element of consistent rhyming. It's not that easy to write a piece which follows an impressively unswerving rhyme scheme without necessarily wrecking the creative presentation of the theme or subject matter of the poem. Notably, this poem possesses such characterization.

The nice topic infused in the poem makes it speak much truth. Death is something that is known to all individuals. Everyone talks about it. Everyone knows that it's like a thief in the night to come and steal the life in you. Though it's a dreadful thing to happen to a person, it should not be feared but rather treated as just any other natural phenomena or inevitable occurrences that one should be prepared for.
Not a single person knows when he will die. (That's why insurance in very important). hahaha Sir, you made the right choice in writing this piece (and in choosing axa) hahahaha
Nice one, Sir Jonathan Jaime.


- joe

[jonathanjaime]

thank you Sir Joe for this. =)

[Sir Joe]

Wow! Ang haba haba ng sinabi q tpos yn lng ang response mo? hahaha (ayos lng)

[Androglossia]

The reaper. Tricky and infamous. I came to love the character because in the Supernatural series, the reaper was super pretty :) I liked how you managed your rhyming and keeping the thought intact. Good job!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I love this theme, seems near to the City of Angels. very beautiful and has a unique progression and stunning word play. Thanks for sharing Sir. Jon :)

[jonathanjaime]

thanks for this. I wrote this around 3am when I wasn't able to sleep because I had too much coffee. then I suddenly had a fear of not waking up when I sleep..

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) seems we are sharing same fear sometimes it happens to me, but anyway whatever happens God only knows when :) keep writing.

[jonathanjaime]

thanks Sir Marc =)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome Sir :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Sir Jonathan, I like the reality of the piece. Death happens anytime and we must ready to face it.
There's one thing I discovered from your poems- they're dark and deep (like the one inspired by the Joker). Do you really love thriller stories? Lol :)

[jonathanjaime]

thanks for the review. yes, it's weird but I'm captivated by the dark and the deep. I find them more appealing than, say, love, although I am, at times, write about the subject matter when inspiration sinks in. =) hehe Hope you find this poem nice.. Lol

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I like it. :)