Ravishing...Like a treasured piece of gold. Hold it, don't let it go. It's true beauty must be shown. For the majestic quality of a gem so pure, can take away the pain and cure any soul that is not whole and attempt its forgotten goal. The purpose of a chunk of gold is not to withhold its power- but to persevere and mold yourself into an exquisite form that's bold.
Compassionate...Like the feeling that reasons out your dealings and reveals life's new meanings. To serve you well; to decipher heaven from hell. Sending out signals of love, from below or above. Could be the root or a flying dove. It's strength is used to determine your mind, fix your tainted kind and leave mistakes behind.
Disciplinary...Whether soothing or grating your brain, the power it holds will sustain the chains it seems to place upon your frame. You see, though I am taught to run, not hide, I hold a secret deep inside. That I am raised by rules. By laws. By regulations. By the people you judge you on the way they grudge you.
Life...It is worth living. When life goes a shamble and all the words seem to ramble on we must take a grain of salt with what comes. No matter the distance, we must never give up or sink because you cannot survive if you're hanging on the brink.
Am I the only one that gave you the first review?! I have to be honest with you, Jolie, this pure magic at work!! I do like random writing, and sometimes random writing really shows who you are, or what emotions are running that you don't even feel. And this is a very good piece. A lot of what you say is true. This is beautifully done!
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Really, I was just about to take this down because this is probably the most random/crazy things I w.. read moreReally, I was just about to take this down because this is probably the most random/crazy things I wrote.. I honestly don't even know what was going on in my head when I wrote it but there's gotta be some reason for all our thoughts... LOL! Thank you so much, its cool u like it, haha. ;)
Don't take it down. I took some poems down that were the only copies I have. One of them was called .. read moreDon't take it down. I took some poems down that were the only copies I have. One of them was called "Storyteller," which a friend of mine suggested I write a poem about the way I look at myself as a storyteller. Well, it had mix reviews. Some say it was a good concept, and others said that it wasn't a poem becuase it was about myself. So I deleted it through here, though I honestly wished I hadn't. But your work is good. Keep writing. BTW, you're pretty ;)
12 Years Ago
Um, if a poem isn't a poem because it is about yourself, then shoot.. I should take half mine down! .. read moreUm, if a poem isn't a poem because it is about yourself, then shoot.. I should take half mine down! LOL I write a lot based on my experiences and my own pain and struggle, but I dont see anything wrong with that. That sounds like an awesome idea for a poem, maybe you can re write it??
Hehe, thanks so much :):)
12 Years Ago
Poems should be about emotions and part of yourself. And you're welcome
Hmmm.... I can't tell if this was after one drink too many or perhaps before and not enough. You're right about one thing, it is "total" although I wouldn't necessarily say random. There is a vague, underlying attempt at structure. I think you need to work with it some more. It could be better and I'm sure you've got it in you to make so.
"No matter the distance, we must never give up or sink because you cannot survive if you're hanging on the brink.
Life. What mine is like..."
Wisdom is the above words. Must go forward even in the worst of situations. Thank you for your thoughts. A outstanding poem.
Coyote
Am I the only one that gave you the first review?! I have to be honest with you, Jolie, this pure magic at work!! I do like random writing, and sometimes random writing really shows who you are, or what emotions are running that you don't even feel. And this is a very good piece. A lot of what you say is true. This is beautifully done!
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Really, I was just about to take this down because this is probably the most random/crazy things I w.. read moreReally, I was just about to take this down because this is probably the most random/crazy things I wrote.. I honestly don't even know what was going on in my head when I wrote it but there's gotta be some reason for all our thoughts... LOL! Thank you so much, its cool u like it, haha. ;)
Don't take it down. I took some poems down that were the only copies I have. One of them was called .. read moreDon't take it down. I took some poems down that were the only copies I have. One of them was called "Storyteller," which a friend of mine suggested I write a poem about the way I look at myself as a storyteller. Well, it had mix reviews. Some say it was a good concept, and others said that it wasn't a poem becuase it was about myself. So I deleted it through here, though I honestly wished I hadn't. But your work is good. Keep writing. BTW, you're pretty ;)
12 Years Ago
Um, if a poem isn't a poem because it is about yourself, then shoot.. I should take half mine down! .. read moreUm, if a poem isn't a poem because it is about yourself, then shoot.. I should take half mine down! LOL I write a lot based on my experiences and my own pain and struggle, but I dont see anything wrong with that. That sounds like an awesome idea for a poem, maybe you can re write it??
Hehe, thanks so much :):)
12 Years Ago
Poems should be about emotions and part of yourself. And you're welcome
Heyyy Shakespeares!! I'm Jolie, 24, and a free spirit. Welcome to my little corner on the cafe. :D
I mostly write poetry, but I've dabbled at stories and I do write my own lyrics for guitar. And.. more..