Second chance

This is dedicated to a friend of mine who has had to start life over in a new mind, and has been given a second chance. It's never too late while you're still living.

Take a good look
Take it all in
Before you know it
Your life will begin.

Open your eyes
To the world around
Close them now
And just hear the sounds

Reach out your hand
Feel the first touch
Of love and support
That you missed so much

Widen your arms
To welcome a hug
For the first time
Put away that shrug

Open your heart
Open your mind
Now it is time
To welcome new life.

Reviews

[Creepy Swine Guy]

People who write rhyming poetry often try so hard to rhyme that they butcher the beat. You have not done this. You have kept your ear to the poem as you wrote it. My only beef is with the very last stanza. You worked so hard to make this crisp and at the last, you gave up that rhyme scheme. How would it sound as ...

Open your heart,
Let go of the strife.
Now it is time
To welcome new life.

Just a thought.

[Jolie Blossom]

Well thank you for your criticism, I really apreciate it. This is my second poem I wrote in a long time, I'm a bit rusty. :) I tried to tie the first and last paragraph together by repeating the first words of the first two lines, but I like the way you rearranged it. :) I'm no expert here, so any advice will be taken gratefully.

[joeysick]

Hello! I run an Instagram account that promotes the work of others, I am in love with this piece and was wondering if I’d be able to post it *you will be credited of course*

[Jolie Blossom]

Of course! My instagram name is _jolinda_
Thank you!

[Kaylor Mason]

The rhythm of this is like gentle raindrops falling upon leaves in a tree . . . effortlessly graceful

[Jolie Blossom]

Aww what a sweet review!! Thank you so much :)

[kublakhan27]

This is very uplifting...a great piece :)

[Jolie Blossom]

I tend to end most of my poems on a positive note, I like to balance the good with the bad so thank you for saying that! :):)

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome...that's no small feat considering how much easier it is to express negative emotions than positive...I know from experience lol :)

[Jolie Blossom]

Oh I used to write soo many dark/negative poems and stories because of my hurt. I still like to, but I really like to incorporate a ray of light into some of my pieces when I feel it is due. I really love reading others' pieces about pain, or something negative because it helps me see their feelings that can be much easier said through writing than a conversation. I think its really beautiful actually.

[kublakhan27]

Those are very good points...I guess I just need more positive things to happen :) Truth be told though, these are really dark days for me, but something you said reminds me of one of my favourite quotes, by Leonard Cohen: "There is a crack in everything/That's how the light gets in."

[Jolie Blossom]

That is a great quote. :) I'm gonna store it in my quotes section in my phone to look at when I'm feeling down. I'm really sorry you are not having the best of days. Ever need to vent or talk, I'm here. Writing is such a blessing, I feel like it's our souls outlet to the world.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Jolie, I will keep that offer in mind :) Yeah I don't know what I'd do if I didn't write lol :P

[BIIKAY]

LOVE IT JOLIEZ!! I CAN TELL IT CAME FROM DEEP DOWN!

[Jolie Blossom]

:) it really did. I like to write from deep down cuz that's where our truest deepest thoughts and feelings hide. Especially since I've put up so many walls... :( thanks bethies :)

[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

A poem very close to my heart. As I myself am seeking a second chance as I portray in my "Phoenix from the flames" poem.

I am beginning to feel the love and support that I missed so much indeed!

Good poem!

[Jolie Blossom]

I'm so glad you liked it. I've been there too, kinda still am. It's so amazing to have even one person who will be there for you in your darkest of places. So happy that you feel the support, it is a blessing. I am gonna read your poem Phoenix from the flames.