Autumn

Observations at the end of Autumn

 

Autumn

 

Its late in September

the trees have turned red

I’m finding it hard

to get out of my bed

The morning’s all cold

and its now darker

Finding motivation

is getting a little harder

 

The dawn chorus is

all but gone

A single sparrow sits

and looks all forlorn

The swallows have flown south

following summer

Should I have gone too?

I sit and wonder

 

The leaves are now falling

all red and gold

The ground’s is now damp

the air a little cold

I watched as my breath

forms before my face

Like it had done

in another year and another place

 

The breeze is now cool

upon my skin

I thinks it is time

we all went in

One for hot chocolate

another for tea

Oh I love

my family ‘round me

 

A little more grey

up in the sky

A little less light

to play outside by

A train whistle sounds

far away

Going into a tunnel taking summer away

Reviews

[Gone]

Well structured and expresses that autumn feeling while describing the changes of the season. Each stanza builds in turn until the complete picture is revealed. Yet at the same time the sense of autumn depression gently increases as you read through the poem. The train at the end providing a gentle closure. This is very good work and you should be proud of it.