Story of a sinner

This poem just came to me and I hope it really speaks to someone. :)

I thought I had everything I ever wanted, that was a lie.

Everyday I would face death, but I would barely slip by.

The devil painted me a picture and there was an immediate attraction.

At the end of the day he would always get the satisfaction.

Truley hell was the direction for my soul.

I did what I wanted and my heart was a lump of coal.

Sometimes when I was alone, I felt empty inside.

I thought no one loved me and at nights I often cried.

One day someone told me, that Jesus died on the cross.

He did it for everyone, even those who were lost.

I started to call Jesus and I instantly felt new.

I no longer desired to do the things I used to do.

I'm so glad that I'm now forever free.

My heart has softened and i'm so full of glee.

So to you people who might have a story like mine,

if you aren't living for God, I pray you do just in time.

Author's Note

Sooo what do u think?

Reviews

[Dupree]

It's a very good poem about salvation. A good take on it and a good form

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

I understand that feeling truly even so i have always been a believe i pulled away from him backslid Jesus and when we find him again all the chains on our heart makes us feel so free it's amazing. I love this Amazing work i am a Protestant Christian, this is going into my Favorites in my library

[Mae Morales]

Sometimes when I was alone, I felt empty inside.I thought no one loved me and at nights I often cried. - I feel that at time and its a horrible kind of feeling.

[Jade (insanity)]

I like it :]
I mean, I'm not very religious or anything but I do pray. I thought it was a really good peom with a really good point :]
Great job :]
Jade

[Deepshikha]

I like the short and sweet way you presented the overall theme of the poem. I liked the rhymes, but the flow was a bit off in some places, even feeling choppy at times. But other than that, it was very nice.

[DareToDream]

wow this is such a positive message! I love this! its very hopeful. nice write : )

[A.Lee]

A well written poem. I agree with Wicahpi, you can tell its entreating non-believers-- extending a figurative hand to them and offering to lead them to something that could be better.

[Wicahpi]

I think it's a message well relayed "truly".
A positive write that only longs to inspire
non-believers into the possibility of something 'more'.
Truly, we are never alone in our despair, yet sometimes
we forget that little tid-bit of information.
Thanks for the gentle reminder.

[deeps]

I think this is one true write here.
I can feel this write here.
This is very well written and very well expressed.