Sleep

we are kids, I am dad,

up at 10:00          

banging pots and pans                                The Force has not awaken

and blaring heavy music bands                   The walls are being shaken

brother jumping on the beds                      I am too tired to yell

sister throwing thing at our heads              sounds like something just fell

We don't want to go to                                 I just want to to

Sleep

Author's Note

I fixed finaly

Reviews

[emipoemi]

I like the form and I like the progression. The two sides of this absurdity is amusing, and you really pulled it off. If I may give some suggestions for tweaks for the sake of musicality and rhyme:

- the "brother" and "sister" lines should be the hard active verb rather than the gerundive: "brother jumps upon the beds/sister throws things at our heads" (there's smoother musicality in that).

- "awoken" and "shaken" don't really rhyme, and since you make it a habit of rhyming those four intermediate lines, then best try using "awaken" ("the Force has yet to awaken").

Other than that, I much enjoyed this. Well done!

[Wyrn Tiger]

will do. thank you!

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[CJ43223]

Haha, it's amusing to read! Two sides of perspectives into one makes the story more appealing and relatable. Hope that we wont get such headaches when we're dads.

[Wyrn Tiger]

one can only wish