Angels

With

Blackened mountains 

Whose summits never quite,

A fear,

  darkly lurking near.

  The milk Maid Died,

And silence 

 swallowed all.

Desolate hours passed away.

By moonlight sped

   Dark, silent, tranquil wings flowing

  In midnight breezes blowing.

 

 

Reviews

[goldenscar__]

Nicely written. Odd format yet cool. I liked the way you expressed the dark side of life.
Thank you

[Zhavy]

Love the format I haven't seen that before. Adding another level of flow. I love it

[angel]

I've never seen anything set up like this. Might I ask who, if anyone, the Milkmaid is? Is she the one who spilled the Milky Way across the sky; an unknown constellation?
This piece has a melancholy feel, at least for me.
I like the ideas and the imagery here;especially the part about the 'dark, silent, tranquil wings flowing in midnight breezes blowing.
That, to me, has a real feeling of peace. Lovely and evocative. Looking at the page, it reminds me of a staircase.What a long one; a stairway all the way to the stars, so to speak.

[Wyrn Tiger]

Okay first off, did you like how it is written? It is about our milky way galaxy and how it ended. It is not gone. It is still there, but My grandpa use to cry every time he looked at the night sky for he can no longer see the milky way. One day he turned to and said "Someday there will be no stars and someday your world your life, will be as dark as the sky" so I wrote about the end.

[angel]

Yes, I liked how it was written very much. Thank you for sharing your grandpa story, also. I think he may very well have been right.
I can sometimes be dense as respects the poetry of others. Mine, of course, is always understandable to me, but it's such a ...personal form of expression, sometimes others can't (not being inside the head of the writer) fully understand it.
Hell, I've read poems that I didn't understand at all. I ask the writer, what did you mean? What were you trying to convey? Because I am very keen to understand everything I read.
I do hope that your granddad was wrong, but as I said, I suspect he may have been right in saying this.