Pathways

One foot in darkness

One foot in light

One foot in happiness

And one foot in spite

 

A step to the left

And I'm smothered with affection

A step to the right

And I'm left to my own destruction

 

Which side to choose?

Which side is better?

I must pick one end

and stay there forever

 

The walls are closing in

Time's running out

Time to choose a side

No time for doubt

 

So I run down that path

The never ending street

Each side beckons

And tugs at my feet

 

Now here is the split

It's time for the choice

I'd call for help

But can't find my voice

 

Right or Left

Left or Right

I cannot read the signs

The day has turned to night

 

So I close my eyes

And spin around

And when they open

I tilt my head to the ground

 

Blindly, I stumble down my path

And realize with a shock

All around me are the familiar trees

Which observe and mock

 

As I walk a bit further

I become filled with wrath

I feel like I may burst

I'm back on my original path

 

Author's Note

Half asleep when i wrote this, please point out grammar, fluency, capitalization I missed, spellings, anything. thanks

Reviews

[Brittany]

I think it flows really well. In some places there are just a few extra words that you could probably take out to improve the fluency a little bit. I love how you took a simple rhyme scheme but made it seem complex. Great poem [:

[Alicia Schroeder]

ah, the choices in life we have to make, awesome write

[Bridget Mcmaken]

This isn't a bad poem. For writing it when your half asleep, its pretty good.

[Weasley]

It's a little choppy but good for the middle of the night haha

[Paradoxical]

pretty good, I like the emotion. In the last stanza, to me it seems like theres too many "I"s but thats just me. Good one!