The Passing of Time

the sun goes

the moon comes

and so on as it's always been

another day closer to death

another day more of life

an experience gained

a wrinkle found

wisdom replaces youth

as present replaces past

life should be lived

so when death arrives

one shouldn't need any more life to live

so, is the passing of time

Reviews

[...]

. very wise and profound ...
. you seem to have mastered brevity ...

[Holly M. May]

I liked this poem it was very simple but potent and I really enjoy that style. The only thing I would point out is that I felt a little bit of an awkward step into the last line, but that could just be me. This is just a thought to be thrown out there but as a suggestion maybe make it "This is the passing of time"; this is only a suggestion so do as you will with it. =3 As I said before though, it was a great read and I really enjoyed it. =3

[Michael G.]

Well written and solid content. Well thought out.
Very good, sir.

[Tasha]

I really liked this Joel, it was different. I loved the title and the ending. Great write.