learning to fly

meh wrote this when rather drunk so excuse the grammar its still meaningfull to me

learning to fly or learning to fall

from the sky we drop unlessthe wings of my demons can carry me

and yet the angels that swoop after me chose to watch in shock

the blood red circle that surrounds my screams ina shroud

the dreams of dying seem oh so much easier

because i can wake up

but now the ground soars closer

one step up the ladder

the morgue whispers my name

2 steps up the ladder

the death of a sinner draws close as i saw downwards

3 steps up the ladder

the noose tightens and a crack rings out

finally the devil becomes an angel

but this angel refuses to fly with his razorblade smile

instead he sits and watches the ladder forever more

and there the noose still swings

graceful and truthfull

holding this demons weight and swinging

waiting

forever

Author's Note

one of my favourites

Reviews

[BLACKCRUSH]

Very powerful write about death , i can see why its one of your favorites. I really liked the flow of this piece it started out very intense and never lost momentum . Angels and demons for many centuries have been battling it out in heaven and hell , your write was very well put together. I like how one of the demons transformed into a angel that was really spectacular , from start to finish this was a great piece and one of my favs im adding it--Outstanding

[Soul Writer]

I'm gonna feedback again. Love this, my favorite piece from you lol. Yes even though it's dark :)

The word choice is really potent and really gripped me.
Check out more of my writing! "Alone" is on here, edited so it doesn't have that really lame policeman bit now.
Soul Writer

[Jonathan Ballam]

this would also be one of my favourites also. The imagery is absorbing and frighteningly original! I felt myself get lost in your words.


PS - From this piece I'm guessing that you're either a goth and/or you read a lot of fantasy?

[H]

Very moving. But you need structure here.

[Julio Angel Ortiz]

Some strong imagery here, and I like the procession exemplified by the ladder rungs. Punctuation needs work, though; the lack of periods at the end of certain lines makes it difficult to get the proper flow of the poem. I think it's a very good start.

[Soul Writer]

I really like this, It's really strong :)
"and there the noose still swings
graceful and truthfull
holding this demons weight and swinging
waiting
forever"

Favorite lines.
Soul Writer