The Real Taste of the Forbidden Fruit

The scented candle melts,

Its flame can be felt;

Heat crawls, desire grows,

Sweat drips as curtains fall.

Their hands seem uneasy,

They touch exploringly,

Caressing each other's body,

Baring each other totally.

His dry hardness plunges

Into her moistened softness -

Pussycat meets cockatoo,

They're now one, though they're two.

As one, they dance with the groove

Which gets faster as they move

Until he reaches his limit

And ends the dance with his vomit.

One, again, becomes two

Few minutes of fun is through,

The dance they had brought pleasure

But what's at stake's their future.

Indeed, they're young and free

Yet both are not happy;

Who were once one - he and she -

Are burdened 'cause now they're three.

Reviews

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) love this piece Sir Joe. Can't find perfect words to explain this poem aside from brilliant and amazing. This is insanely beautiful. Love the progression and quirkiness of this story. It is cool. Thanks for sharing.

My Fave:

His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two.

[Sir Joe]

Thank you so much for reading this piece, Sir Marc. I'm so happy that you liked it!
Well, that's also my favorite part of the poem and in the actual act. LOL hahaha just kidding!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) Welcome Sir Joe, I enjoy reading your work.

[Sir Joe]

I'm delighted. =)

[Dhaye]

I like the last stanza:
"Indeed, they're young and free
Yet both are not happy;
Who were once one - he and she -
Are burdened 'cause now they're three."
At least you emphasized that lust at young age doesn't have a happy ending. It is somewhat a reminder to the young ones.

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, Dhaye. Oh! I thought you're on a vacation.

I just thought that an ending like that would make the poem sound cleaner or more wholesome since I started the poem with a "slightly" lustful atmosphere.

[Dhaye]

Maybe next week. I have to do some stuff here in school until Friday for our performance bonus. I have no choice but to prioritize it. Hehe. Besides, I am waiting for my sister who will go with me.

[Sir Joe]

Ahhh, Ok. Good luck, then, to what you're doing. =)

[Mockingbird]

there's an urgency to their becoming one. subtle yet explicit style of erotica. this could be a one night stand the way they are unsure about their future with one another, perhaps regretting what they have done. great job.

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, Mockingbird. I appreciate your words. =)

[Sir Joe]

Ah, my friend, this is an outstanding piece of ... erotic, humorous, great metaphors ;) I enjoyed it very much!!

"His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two".

You're stellar.... lol ;)

- Elisa

[Sir Joe]

Thank you so much, Elisa Laura. =)
I'm so glad that you enjoyed it =)

Sincerely my pleasure Joe, I pray for more time, and more reviews to give to good poets like you :)

[Sir Joe]

Ohh! Thank you =)
I'll also pray for that. =)

;) you will be rewarded :P

[Sir Joe]

You will be rewarded as well and greatly appreciated. =)

[Pax]

haha..another one of your hmm...its really nice the metaphors really fits the situation that you wrote. well done, enjoyed its engaging passion.

[CHRIS ANDES]

professionally written
this is another face of reality
keep it up sir joe
=]

[Clayton Wulfric Fernand..]

A beautiful poem highlighting the importance of protection!
Now that's what you call erotic with a message!
Fantastic, absolutely fantastic, please do keep them coming!
(Pardon the pun :P)

[Sir Joe]

Thank you so much Clayton. (=
That's a fantastic review from you. (=
I appreciate your taking time to review this poem. (=

[Alcoholocaust]

Damn. This is what you call erotica, no? :]

[Sir Joe]

I didn't intend it to be an erotic poetry. I just showed reality. (=

[Yellow Butterfly]

With forbidden comes precaution and with precaution comes protection......always missing in the heat of the moment.

Young, three, no longer single!!!!

Your poem conveys a message in this excellent write - well done! ;O)

[Sir Joe]

Thank you very much (=
I'm so happy that you appreciate this piece. (=

[Sir Joe]

common among the teens tsk tsk tsk!