Lol :) love this piece Sir Joe. Can't find perfect words to explain this poem aside from brilliant and amazing. This is insanely beautiful. Love the progression and quirkiness of this story. It is cool. Thanks for sharing.
My Fave:
His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two.
Thank you so much for reading this piece, Sir Marc. I'm so happy that you liked it!
Well, that.. read moreThank you so much for reading this piece, Sir Marc. I'm so happy that you liked it!
Well, that's also my favorite part of the poem and in the actual act. LOL hahaha just kidding!
11 Years Ago
Lol :) Welcome Sir Joe, I enjoy reading your work.
I like the last stanza:
"Indeed, they're young and free
Yet both are not happy;
Who were once one - he and she -
Are burdened 'cause now they're three."
At least you emphasized that lust at young age doesn't have a happy ending. It is somewhat a reminder to the young ones.
Thank you, Dhaye. Oh! I thought you're on a vacation.
I just thought that an ending lik.. read moreThank you, Dhaye. Oh! I thought you're on a vacation.
I just thought that an ending like that would make the poem sound cleaner or more wholesome since I started the poem with a "slightly" lustful atmosphere.
11 Years Ago
Maybe next week. I have to do some stuff here in school until Friday for our performance bonus. I ha.. read moreMaybe next week. I have to do some stuff here in school until Friday for our performance bonus. I have no choice but to prioritize it. Hehe. Besides, I am waiting for my sister who will go with me.
11 Years Ago
Ahhh, Ok. Good luck, then, to what you're doing. =)
there's an urgency to their becoming one. subtle yet explicit style of erotica. this could be a one night stand the way they are unsure about their future with one another, perhaps regretting what they have done. great job.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you, Mockingbird. I appreciate your words. =)
Ah, my friend, this is an outstanding piece of ... erotic, humorous, great metaphors ;) I enjoyed it very much!!
"His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two".
You're stellar.... lol ;)
- Elisa
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you so much, Elisa Laura. =)
I'm so glad that you enjoyed it =)
11 Years Ago
Sincerely my pleasure Joe, I pray for more time, and more reviews to give to good poets like you :)
Lol :) love this piece Sir Joe. Can't find perfect words to explain this poem aside from brilliant and amazing. This is insanely beautiful. Love the progression and quirkiness of this story. It is cool. Thanks for sharing.
My Fave:
His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two.
Thank you so much for reading this piece, Sir Marc. I'm so happy that you liked it!
Well, that.. read moreThank you so much for reading this piece, Sir Marc. I'm so happy that you liked it!
Well, that's also my favorite part of the poem and in the actual act. LOL hahaha just kidding!
11 Years Ago
Lol :) Welcome Sir Joe, I enjoy reading your work.
A beautiful poem highlighting the importance of protection!
Now that's what you call erotic with a message!
Fantastic, absolutely fantastic, please do keep them coming!
(Pardon the pun :P)
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
Thank you so much Clayton. (=
That's a fantastic review from you. (=
I appreciate your t.. read moreThank you so much Clayton. (=
That's a fantastic review from you. (=
I appreciate your taking time to review this poem. (=
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