The Real Taste of the Forbidden Fruit

The Real Taste of the Forbidden Fruit

A Poem by Sir Joe

The scented candle melts,
Its flame can be felt;
Heat crawls, desire grows,
Sweat drips as curtains fall.

Their hands seem uneasy,
They touch exploringly,
Caressing each other's body,
Baring each other totally.

His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two.

As one, they dance with the groove
Which gets faster as they move
Until he reaches his limit
And ends the dance with his vomit.

One, again, becomes two
Few minutes of fun is through,
The dance they had brought pleasure
But what's at stake's their future.

Indeed, they're young and free
Yet both are not happy;
Who were once one - he and she -
Are burdened 'cause now they're three.

© 2013 Sir Joe


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Lol :) love this piece Sir Joe. Can't find perfect words to explain this poem aside from brilliant and amazing. This is insanely beautiful. Love the progression and quirkiness of this story. It is cool. Thanks for sharing.

My Fave:

His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading this piece, Sir Marc. I'm so happy that you liked it!
Well, that.. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Lol :) Welcome Sir Joe, I enjoy reading your work.
Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

I'm delighted. =)



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I like the last stanza:
"Indeed, they're young and free
Yet both are not happy;
Who were once one - he and she -
Are burdened 'cause now they're three."
At least you emphasized that lust at young age doesn't have a happy ending. It is somewhat a reminder to the young ones.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Dhaye. Oh! I thought you're on a vacation.

I just thought that an ending lik.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

11 Years Ago

Maybe next week. I have to do some stuff here in school until Friday for our performance bonus. I ha.. read more
Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

Ahhh, Ok. Good luck, then, to what you're doing. =)
there's an urgency to their becoming one. subtle yet explicit style of erotica. this could be a one night stand the way they are unsure about their future with one another, perhaps regretting what they have done. great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

Thank you, Mockingbird. I appreciate your words. =)
Ah, my friend, this is an outstanding piece of ... erotic, humorous, great metaphors ;) I enjoyed it very much!!

"His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two".

You're stellar.... lol ;)

- Elisa

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

Ohh! Thank you =)
I'll also pray for that. =)

11 Years Ago

;) you will be rewarded :P
Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

You will be rewarded as well and greatly appreciated. =)
Lol :) love this piece Sir Joe. Can't find perfect words to explain this poem aside from brilliant and amazing. This is insanely beautiful. Love the progression and quirkiness of this story. It is cool. Thanks for sharing.

My Fave:

His dry hardness plunges
Into her moistened softness -
Pussycat meets cockatoo,
They're now one, though they're two.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading this piece, Sir Marc. I'm so happy that you liked it!
Well, that.. read more
Marc Marlon Villaflor

11 Years Ago

Lol :) Welcome Sir Joe, I enjoy reading your work.
Sir Joe

11 Years Ago

I'm delighted. =)
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haha..another one of your hmm...its really nice the metaphors really fits the situation that you wrote. well done, enjoyed its engaging passion.

Posted 12 Years Ago


professionally written
this is another face of reality
keep it up sir joe
=]

Posted 12 Years Ago


A beautiful poem highlighting the importance of protection!
Now that's what you call erotic with a message!
Fantastic, absolutely fantastic, please do keep them coming!
(Pardon the pun :P)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sir Joe

12 Years Ago

Thank you so much Clayton. (=
That's a fantastic review from you. (=
I appreciate your t.. read more
Damn. This is what you call erotica, no? :]

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sir Joe

12 Years Ago

I didn't intend it to be an erotic poetry. I just showed reality. (=
With forbidden comes precaution and with precaution comes protection......always missing in the heat of the moment.

Young, three, no longer single!!!!

Your poem conveys a message in this excellent write - well done! ;O)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sir Joe

12 Years Ago

Thank you very much (=
I'm so happy that you appreciate this piece. (=
common among the teens tsk tsk tsk!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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