Stop, Look and Listen

Sound is quick

But light is swift.

No wonder why

Many appear bright

'Til you hear them speak.

Reviews

[Belle]

The content is of a proverb, yet you worked with meter.

first stanza
1st line : 3 syllables
2nd line : dimeter

second stanza
1st line : dimeter
2nd line : 5 syllable
3rd line : 5 syllable

Sir Joe, this is very much like Emily Dickinson's both in content and in form.
The content strikes great power and the form is very attractive. I like how you break the lines, the last line of the first stanza is ushering the first line of the second to its place by sharing the same number of meter, then comes the power of the last two lines which are greater than the last of the first stanza. They are like in a process of a dichotomy, to which separation takes place to recognize the other to understand its importance.

[Belle]

P.S. I feel small, again. :(

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, big sister, for having a deeper-than-the-surface survey and a structuralistic look through of this poem of mine. I've heard so much of Emily Dickinson but have read too little about her and her works. I better check her works out. =)
I'm so glad to have had my poems surveyed by keen eyes as yours. =)
Never feel small. I remember you saying, "The first person who should lift you up is you yourself".
Why feel small when others, including I, see you as a great person?

=)

[Belle]

The structuralist side of me comes out naturally only when a literary piece has excellent structure. I am equally glad to read you Li'l Bro, you are growing at an excellent phase as a poet. ..And thank you for being always a morale booster. It is an honor to be considered as great woman by a highly principled individual such you. ..Keep writing.

[Sir Joe]

I'm flattered and overwhelmed. =)
We're both thankful to each other. =)
Let's thank God that we're siblings by heart =)

[MoriartyMesa]

Let me just say, as a tiny bit of a fan of miss jane, this is like a smooth hit and must have been the influence, when you live near San Francisco, this is like Mary Jane fans.


Nice

[Sir Joe]

Thank you so much, MoriartyMesa! =)
I wish I could go to San Francisco. =)

[The dark story]

short and concise poem.a very nice one

[CHRIS ANDES]

I find little humor in it
=]
another good write of yours!

[Autumn]

Hahaha love it! Yes you have talent to demonstrate something so true in a so short poem!

[Sir Joe]

Thank you so much, Autumn. (=

[Corset]

so true.

[Gene Hiccup]

you really have a talent in writing sir joe, hehehe, you were able to put so many meanings by just using five lines...

[Sir Joe]

thank you, Gene. (=

[Coyote Poetry]

Good thoughts. A good opening for more statements to create thoughts and discussion. Science and real life can be two different directions. Thank you for the very good poetry.
Coyote

[Sir Joe]

I won't get tired of saying thank you, sir. (=

[Sir Joe]

true to many (=

[Brandon Mathis]

its really good but you should add some more to it