CAFFEINATED SLEEPLESSNESS

Abandon these veins

Connected, connecting

To my core rioting.

 

Invigorate me not!

Dark knees and pale hands

Now tremble unplanned.

 

Masturbate my mind

To jerk proteined ideas off

Not random, bizarre thoughts

 

Like outdoor threesomes

Or Temple Running

And TV guestings!

 

Importune me no more!

Bloodshot eyes need great doze

Be they bagged, let them close

 

Soon, we shall both repose

Alas! You’ll awake not

While I will rise up!

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Oh geez this is priceless, from an insomniac, I hear you! Much fun...start counting back from 100...99...98...you are getting very sleepy...

Masturbate my mind
To jerk proteined ideas off
Not random, bizarre thoughts

That might be what's keeping you UP at night! ;-)

[Sir Joe]

=) Frieda, I believe we both experience the same thing. =D
Sometimes, it's really very hard to fall asleep so random thoughts just keep flooding in. =)

[Frieda P]

Tell me about it, my mind speeds along at night, you'd think it was drag racing! ;-)

[Sir Joe]

=)
I hear you! =)

[Helen Crutchett]

Wonderful write sir joe! Clever and unique.

Helena

[Sir Joe]

Thank you so much, Helena!

=)

[Holly Mason]

one sheep
two sheep
three sheep
sleep
four sheep
five sheep
six sheep
sleep
I have written it out
pulled out my favorite pillow
I am now on
1002 sheep
finally sleep
nice meeting you I enjoyed this and look forward to digging into your mind a little
thank you for the sheep sleep and for sharing*)...Holly

[Sir Joe]

You are so welcome, Holly.
Thank you so much!
=)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I love the style of your writing, this piece is strong and creative. very vivid and dynamic in words play. I admired the unconventional usage of words which draws the readers to think and eventually merging into the story. I like how the story unfold and how I exprienced the whimsical landscape of poetry. This is a brilliant work, keep writing!

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, Sir Marc!
I hope to hear from you again. =)
Nothing makes a poet happier than receiving appreciation from a fellow poet. =)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome :)

[Buniheart]

I really love the message you convey in this, just as your others - very very very much a good read!

[Sir Joe]

I am so happy to hear from you again, Buniheart!
It's actually my comeback poem because I've been inactive here for the past several months due to some business. Thank you for taking time to review my poem. =) I hope to hear from you again soon. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of the language. You made your point loud and clear. I like the directness and the way you led the reader to the logical ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, once again, Coyote for the appreciation.
I'm so happy to be back here at WritersCafe.
That's my come back after. After so many busy months, I've finally made another poem, Caffeined Sleeplessness.
Thanks a lot =)

[Sir Joe]

If you cannot sleep, just write instead of waiting for yourself to fall asleep.
Caffeine, i hate you. =)

[Pax]

First of all I want to say welcome back kabayan…

Literally my mind is thinking something else….lol for that! :D… consistent ka nga kabayan… like the last time I had read one of your poems… the style is still the puzzling playfulness in thoughts as in words… which is really great… Seems like a struggle on what thoughts to come out… an urge to write perhaps that so many thoughts running in mind that nothing comes out… until you begun to tire yourself but still well awake… not giving up… interesting approach kabayan…

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, bro. =)
I hope you appreciate the piece. hehehe

[Pax]

yup i did! :)... i think i still haven't grasp the full meaning... maybe"I'm not too close and I'm not to far either" no matter what i enjoyed this piece... your most welcome :)

[Sir Joe]

hehehe well, in that poem, maybe the poetic persona is just trying to talk to the coffee, specifically to the drug called caffeine in it. haha
i'll just leave the deciphering to you as a reader-reviewer. anyway, i wrote it not just for me but also for you guys =)
Thanks, Pax!

[Pax]

sabi ko na eh... there is something about the title...lol.. yup im a reader- reviewer... wala naman kasi akong background kaya ito.. kung anong pumapasok sa isip sulat lng ng sulat... :)

[Sir Joe]

hehehe ganyan tlga mnsn,,,,

[Belle]

Many times, writing is a refuge to a troubled soul, and whatever it is that troubles you makes me glad at some point. Welcome back! It is always a pleasure to read from you little brother.

I will decipher this with the help of Asset later. But I must tell now, you are consistent with your style. Infusing contemporary words makes the poem more interesting to read. Evidently the poem has a young soul.

[Sir Joe]

Oh, my God, Ma'am Belle! hehehe
I can't believe i'm back! (OA) hahaha
Thank you for the warm welcome. I hope to see more of your writings as I would like you to see mine. =)