The Boy and the Stars

-Update 2/19/15-
I'm submitting this for my ENGL 205 class.
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As the sun sat beyond the horizon,
Darkness grew and shadows rose.
With scattering light and calm winds,
A lone child gazed into the sky.

One by one, twinkling stars began to emerge,
Peeking from beyond the blanket of space.
They glimmered with joy, dancing far above,
As the boy spectated their beautiful performance.

Continuing to watch, the boy sat upon the ground,
As cool blades of grass tickled his legs.
"You're all I have left," he said with tears.
"Please, take me with you and erase my fears..."

The child grew tired with every breath,
Lost in a life that made no sense.
With a tear and a smile, the young boy muttered,
"I want to leave... please take me away..."

As the night expired, so did the child.
Forever gone from the world he once knew.
But the following night, high into the sky,
A new star appeared with an innocent shine...

Author's Note

Just a little something I thought up a while ago. Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Starshyne52]

Oh...my...goodness... can I tell you how my eyes are brimming here...I literally said to someone yesterday how you can look up into the sky , see the stars and feel like a nothing ;so small..yet at the same time feel so very much a part of them.. wow..!! Ohhhh... my heart....! thank you

[The Watcher]

You're welcome, and thanks for the review!

[Wondering Mind]

lovely imagery in this touching write. your word use is commendable

[The Watcher]

Thank you =)

[Maria]

This is so sweet. The boy's way too young and innocent to be so broken. I love all the meanings entwined into this poem. It's really well written as well. :)

[The Watcher]

Thank you so much Maria! =) I see way too many children these days who're broken and depressed, and I pity them.

[Adam Faison]

Well written, can relate to us all who want to just go away to someplace far away.

[The Watcher]

Indeed, and thank you for the review.

[Alm]

Some will look with pity and misunderstanding. I will look at the stars and smile back as well. It is a nice way to think of it. Every unhappy child is one of those stars now, in the sky.

-Alm :)

[The Watcher]

Happy stars, all together high above us. Thanks for the review!

[Alm]

You're welcome :)

[demureminds]

I never expected the end, great job! I like how this brings you through several emotions and at first you feel bad for the boy, but it all ends very nicely. Great poem!

[The Watcher]

Thanks

[Admiral Kirk]

Beautiful. The little star thing at the end put a smile on my face. Very beautiful and touching.

[The Watcher]

Thank you very much

[Pritesh]

Great attachment of sorrow and nature.The urge for death is quiet appealing.keep writing.

[The Watcher]

Thanks Pritesh, kudos to you.

[Elaenor Aisling]

This reminded me a little of "The Little Match Girl" by Hans Christian Andersen. It is vivid and beautiful in its language. lovely work.

[The Watcher]

Thank you very much Elaenor. Now that you mention it, this does bring back memories of The Little Match Girl despite how long it's been since my mother read it to me.