Spinning thoughts

I wanted to create this mostly 100% true piece. Any thoughts?

I love you more and more each moment
But sometimes you make me want to jump in front of traffic
I run to you to protect me
I feel like you bulid me up
To push me down
You would probably let me drown
Just so you wouldn't have to put down that joint
I miss you more when you ignore my soul
My head hurts when you tell me that your sorry
My heart hurts when you show me your with other girls
You say you really like me
Then why do you hurt the people you care about?
    I think about you nonstop
How can I forget about you
When I care about you more than myself?
You say we are not toghther, then say we are only with eachother
What?
Why are we so unsure?
       Your actions are great towards me
You would do anything for me
I would anything for you
So why do you say messed up stuff to me?
Why do you like to hurt?
You think your tough.. I seen you cry
I love you but it hurts
I hug my wet pillow
Making beleive it's you
I smell my clothes
From the last time I hugged you, a few days ago
I still smell the sweet scent of you lingering on my shirt
      During the day I close my eyes, prenting I am kissing you
I want to taste and feel your tounge again and again
During the night I dream of you and I
I left people to be with you
I am falling for you harder
Even when we done this for a long time
Ahhh my memories of you and pictures of you and I
Are better than the reality of you
You and I use eachother for drugs, money, and sex
We both know that
Love is like life, confusing but worth it
I need to smell you right now
I want to stare your brown eyes look into my brown eyes
I know you changed since the summer
Into something better
Sometimes it hurts to even feel
But I don't like it when I don't feel anything at all
Nothing makes sense anymore
I need more from you than a "maybe"
I just want to be with you right now
Come here and lay next to me
Gently brush my hair with your fingers
And I will give you a massage anywhere
    You are like my miracle
Don't push me away
My problems dissapear when you are here
I really smile when I see you
I had you numerous amount of times
I need to be with you right now again
I cannot wait another second
         Say something sweet and tell me that you feel this way
Or I can believe your lies again
Just be nice to me
I'm tired of faking and geting hurt
Lets just be happy and love
I just need to squeeze your body
Because without you I shake or scartch my body
I need to feel your pure feelings
The sound of your voice rescues my time
When you are around things feel better
I know we are tired
Don't leave me
Lets cuddle and not pretend
Lets feel like everything is truely better
Our words are confusing when we do talk a lot than a little
So just hug me, hold me, touch me, and kiss me a lot
There is something wrong with me, but I don't care.

Author's Note

Igore spelling. Thanks.

Reviews

[Brittni]

Unfortunately I am at work so I can't write the lengthy review that I wish to, but the main points are they you hit every note perfectly about wanting a love to be a reality and not a fantasy. I loved this poem, very well written. Keep on my dear!!

Brittni

[Stella]

Beautiful poem, I totally feel your pain. Nice job!

[Jessica Harmony]

i like this!

[Calypso]

Love shouldn't hurt this bad sweetie.

[Jeff]

Nicely written.

[Cassiopia Summers]

Truly heartfelt, and I can feel your pain. I'd leave a longer review lol, but it's off to school I go in about ten minutes lol, and there's still some things I need to do. Just know, this is one truly fantastic write, because it comes from within you, from your heart, body, mind, and soul. That's what readers connect with, happy writing.

[Ashley]

The love is suppose 2 be fun. But the hurt mixtures in with the emotions. :0 :)

[Coyote Poetry]

"Come here and lay next to me
Gently brush my hair with your fingers
And I will give you a massage anywhere
You are like my miracle
Don't push me away"
True love can overcome everything. The bad and the good will test two people. Wise people hold on tighter when times are hard. I like the complete poem. A excellent ending to a very good poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[The old me]

written nicely. great details.

[~Lizzy♬]

Wonderful poem. It was beautifully written in every line :)

~Lizzard~