just as a pill

just another poem enjoy

 Just as a pill
Instead of making me better
your making me sick
i cant stay on this pill
what is different?
where am i?
this is how it feels
when your awake at night
because you miss someone
i feel lost and gone
without you here
without you near
still don't know where am i?
what have you done to me?
i took these pills because of you
im lying here all alone
where can i run?
to get outta here?
to the center of nowhere
you make me crushed
my heart is slowly dieing and breaking
       the next day as i wake up on the hospital floor
i realize i cant stay here
who knew you leave me
you promised me you'd be around
but where are you?
i don't want to be all alone

Author's Note

pillz

Reviews

[Tainted Devotion]

In some strange way, I kind of like how scrambled this poem looks and feels. You captured to me in my mind what a person would be going through in a situation like this. Pills and mixed emotions would most certainly make me feel scrambled and just lost, without a clue how to solve issues. You did a nice job here indeed. Keep it up.

[IAmFiyah]

I really got a sense of what you were feeling this poem. I agree with the other review that how the poem was written helped give a sense of the mixed emotions you experienced.

[bwmorency]

Hm,the first line reminded me of a P!nk song. Otherwise I enjoyed it.