Invisible

This is a exerpt of something i wrote along time ago about a daughter and her multiple in her mind, and how they disover all the problems they blindly over looked in their family.

Tee hee hee hee,

I have something you can't see,

I'm holding it infront of me,

Something you said cannot be.

 

Hee Hee Hee Ho,

I have something i'd like to show,

Something that i happen to know,

Will surely make your mind just go.

 

Hoo Hoo Hoo Hot,

Hear your heart it seems to rot,

your efforts all have been for naught,

Now your eyes seem to be caught.

 

Hi Hi Hi Pad,

Your eyes show me that you are mad,

How does it feel to have been had?

By the person you Lovingly caled, your dad.

 

Author's Note

ignore the grammer problems please lol

Reviews

[N. Scott Cohen]

I like the concept and the use of rhyme and imagination, but had I not been given what the poem was about I would have had a very hard time analyzing it and figuring out it's subject. Very playful and imaginative though.

[J,D]

her name was paddie (just in cause you were wondering about the last paragraph (Hi Hi Hi Pad))