Motionless (a poem)

a poem of feeling immobile with someone you love

Motionless (a poem)

 

Together

That’s what we are as we relax on the smooth grass of the ground

My head on yours and your head on my chest

We are slowly breathing, taking in the silence and peace

 

The sky is lit up by hundreds of stars as the moon shines brightly as the biggest star

I can smell your strawberry scent from your luscious hair

It’s my drug

To hear you breath so smoothly and smell your tonics

 

My arm is draped around your body

Holding you to me

Promising to protect you

To keep you in my arms forever

 

You give my chest a small kiss

And I give a small smile

Because I know you feel for me just as I do you

No matter what

 

We both look at the stars

Seeing nothing moving

No shooting stars

No dreams

Because we have everything right here that we need

As we lay still

Together

Motionless

Under the night sky

Author's Note

i hope you guys have had this feeling or will have this feeling. i haven't yet, but one day i will. :)

Reviews

[lindsay]

This is so sweet and adorable. I have experienced with my lovely boyfriend. It's wonderful let me tell you. He is the military and reading this made me think of him being here and when we did that and made me smile and it is a great ending to my day. I like that there is no rhyming or real steady flow. That creates more of an image for me because it becomes a story. Great job!

[HappyTaylor]

I've felt this....Well from the girls perspective, but still. It's a beautiful thing and you captured it wonderfully. Thank you SO much for sharing this.!

[Miss Coral]

I really like the last stanza. c:
Great piece.. beautiful imagery.

[bbb]

Ah, I have had this feeling once or twice, only to later have it shattered. But reading this makes me realize what a hopeless romantic I am! I absolutely love it. :)

[Robyn]

So beautiful. what a great moment you captured. i really love this

[Lilly]

This is really beautiful. So tender and really lovely.

[jessfoundwonder]

I love the last bit about not seeing shooting stars because you have everything you need. This was really good. I hope you and I both find it someday (=

[hillzz]

wow !!! awsome write:)

[Madame Mystique]

I'm a hopeless romantic in denial, i like to pretend to not be interested in romance (i'm not talking about the mushy gushy kissie thing, I mean real romance).

Great read :)

[Jong Schrijver]

Great poem right here. Great feeling and great description. Good job:)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I have had the feeling before. I think that this was great. This was nicely written. Love is a beautiful thing. You will someone who loves you a lot. Great write. Thanks for sharing. :)