Bottom of the Ocean (a poem)

a poem of love at the bottom of the ocean

Bottom of the Ocean (a poem)

 

We sink down through watery depths of the ocean

Sinking slowly with no intended motion

We sink down as the bubbles float up

Ah….your beauty---I can’t get enough

 

Your dark brown hair flowing in the water

Your eyes glistening like no other

We speak no words…

No breathing….

 

The schools of fish zooming by

The seaweed waving as if to say “hi”

The water rippling above with the light

As if both are in an epic fight

 

Pop…pop…pop goes the bubbles

Forgetting all of our troubles

But I don’t care because all I see is you

And that’s enough for me too…

 

We hit the bottom and the sand puffs up

But all we feel is love

Is that enough?

My heart aches at the sweet tenderness of your smooth face

A memory that is hard to erase

I caress you like a pearl…a sweet, shiny pearl

Allow of our emotions to unfurl

 

I promise to give you love and pure devotion

As long as your promise to stay with me here…at the bottom of the ocean

Author's Note

It may not have an idolized form or anything because I didn't really care about that. I just wanted to express the feelings of love and the beauty of it. Tell me what ya think!

Reviews

[Richard Williams]

This is really cute, I like this a lot. Funny thing, I've lately been thinking of a poem about being under the ocean (or some water perhaps), so when I saw this I was tickled. I love the ocean, and you do it justice here, with the extra weave, well done!

[Zoe Anne]

The imagery in this poem is good. I like the underwater theme, and the feeling put into it was nicely done. Please post more poems.

[Ally Baker]

i loved this :) i always find it hard to write poems with a rythming scheme but you didn't seem to have trouble doing that without disrupting the flow of the poem. The way you described the love for this girl and her beauty was amazing. I could visualize this entire poem, even the feelings described in it. Great job :D

--Ally Baker
"Don't make fun of the writer. She might put you in one of her books and kill you."

[Ashley Black]

very very beautiful poem definitely going in my favorites good job :)