Bottom of the Ocean (a poem)

a poem of love at the bottom of the ocean

Bottom of the Ocean (a poem)

 

We sink down through watery depths of the ocean

Sinking slowly with no intended motion

We sink down as the bubbles float up

Ah….your beauty---I can’t get enough

 

Your dark brown hair flowing in the water

Your eyes glistening like no other

We speak no words…

No breathing….

 

The schools of fish zooming by

The seaweed waving as if to say “hi”

The water rippling above with the light

As if both are in an epic fight

 

Pop…pop…pop goes the bubbles

Forgetting all of our troubles

But I don’t care because all I see is you

And that’s enough for me too…

 

We hit the bottom and the sand puffs up

But all we feel is love

Is that enough?

My heart aches at the sweet tenderness of your smooth face

A memory that is hard to erase

I caress you like a pearl…a sweet, shiny pearl

Allow of our emotions to unfurl

 

I promise to give you love and pure devotion

As long as your promise to stay with me here…at the bottom of the ocean

Author's Note

It may not have an idolized form or anything because I didn't really care about that. I just wanted to express the feelings of love and the beauty of it. Tell me what ya think!

Reviews

[Richard Williams]

This is really cute, I like this a lot. Funny thing, I've lately been thinking of a poem about being under the ocean (or some water perhaps), so when I saw this I was tickled. I love the ocean, and you do it justice here, with the extra weave, well done!

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

0.0. I am amazed! Wonderful!! I personally love the ocean and can stare at it for hours just thinking or listing to music(or more often then none, both).

[Miss Coral]

Cute piece.. beautiful too. :)
I really liked the flow, but think that perhaps the word choice could be broadened up a bit. Overall, great job.

-Coral

[Desert Dreamer]

The image of sinking into the ocean is haunting, yet beautiful. I get a feeling of peace in your poem, sinking silently, yet when I think of sinking into the water I feel death nearby. I think I am seeing something you did not intend, but you have created an amazing image in my mind. Love your poem!

[Trisha]

wow this is beautiful and the subject is something that I truly feel connected with through spirit.

The picture you painted was amazing and it was also delightful to my soul.

[Lightfalls]

Oh this is nice!! It's so fun and cool sounding it's like you can see pictures, blue green and light at the bottom of a shallow sea! Nice imagery, oh...it's great all around.

[Love Is Dead]

I think this was cool but the rhythm was good even though i like poems when theres no rhyme better this one was good though compared to the other rhyming poems other people write actually

[chaotic katie]

loved it great job keep up the great work

[Meaghan M]

It's lovely. Really, I'm usually more prone to unrhyming poems, but I absolutely loved this. The last two stanzas are brilliant. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to read more.

[S.D.S.]

Omg I read this and it was great. This is like proffessional! XD