Sixteen

Wandering thoughts of a scattered young mind....

Sometimes feelings become far too real

Emotions begin to consume your world.

Eventually sleep is the only escape

Even a razor hardly dulls the pain.

The Earth won't stop spinning

And time seems to whirl by too quickly.

People come into your life

Then disappear with a piece of your heart.

Society threatens and sneers 

Judging everything you hold dear.

We're only human

I'm only a girl.

My mind is full of fragile thoughts

Strongly guarded by impenetrable walls of steel.

Youth are corrupted, overshadowed, scared

I'm only sixteen...

And life is already a burden. 

 

Reviews

[Tomás Ó C..]

Take a step back and take it at your own pace. Think, when people had nothing theysurvived and enjoyed. They could.... their priorities were different than us today.

Then you can cut it at life,and cut out the razor blades.They are only for shaving, OK?

[KassidyBaker12]

I can relate to this. Your poem really catches the emotions you feel. I enjoyed it :)

[Tinotenda Nyevedzanai]

A wonderful capture of the weight of being a teenager well done :)

[Mary]

I really feel for the ending, love it!

[ZeniaK]

We're only human, I'm only a girl are my favorite lines because they are the most raw to me. You're right, too, this life is tough, but... remember with the sorrows and pains that there is also joy. Great poem, it was truthful.

[Sarah]

Amazing and very true. Life is an awful thing

[lily]

Amazing write.
Well done :)

[Calissa Knox]

Wonderful insight, and imagery.

I love the line, "People come into your life
Then disappear with a piece of your heart."

You expressed many truths of life through this poem,
and you expressed all of them beautifully.

[Tea]

That's so true in so many ways. I love this piece.

[Aehr]

Very contemplative write. Life can be such a burden even at sixteen. Growing up is hard in general. Good job :)

[zainul]

You already realized the difficulty of life.
You can overcome it through wit and patience.
Very good write indeed.