The Island of Salvation

I was thinkin about the beautiful beaches of Hawaii at night and somehow this came out...oh how i miss it so!

Salvation dances among the tree tops that bow to the glorious moon in surrender

Floral fragrances tickle the senses, intoxicating

Summoning the untamed soul

It is here where we can sail upon the waves of indigo in our most vulnerable façade

And unleash the dreams that ride amongst the tides like forgotten messages

Trapped inside a single bottle

In this place, ones freedom is embraced and held with the most delicate of intentions

Wearing just our skin, we rest upon the soft sands of sin and bask in the presence of those before us

 

Reviews

[Ekai Stone]

first line reminds me of these huge evergreens around my house. as the wind blows super hard -sure enough- the tree tops bow to the moon. i dig it!

[Jillian Alexis]

yes.. I have yet to see them bow to the moon but I do remember them bowing in general :) thank you for your lovely reviews. Glad to know you are still reading

[SpokenWord]

I am sure many have found salvation in Hawaii the beaches there are incredible. I enjoyed your word use and the different ways you described things. Nice and sensual poetry.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the creative stir in full tantalizing bloom~

[FlawedByDesign]

I like how the title and 90% of the poem is about salvation, but then the last line, "Wearing just our skin, we rest upon the soft sands of sin", talks about being naked and reveling in sin. It's like you're saying the path to salvation is through the sins of the flesh. That is definitely interesting, as I mention the same thing in my "ONE NIGHT" piece I posted recently.

Nicely done.

[An owl on the moon]

Beautifully expressed.. life unleashed in all its splendour... You give this world the Edenic feeling and wonder it deserves! Oh, been to Hawaii just once.. can still feel the warmth of the waves.. yes.. a beautiful place for sure...

[alan khan]

i liked what you did with this. really enjoyed it like i enjoy all of your stuff. awesome work.