An Unspeakable Desire

Break down my barriers with the strength of your presence

Close my eyes with the breath of your words

Make my heart beat faster, with the impact of your beauty

Captivate me with your imagination

Steal my soul with your grace

Cry me the tears of your eternal being

Touch the skin that will enfold you

Make me tremble

Make me weak
Make me feel the rage,

Rage which clouds my mind

Push me

Pull me

Make me fall hard

Release my pain, pain hidden by pride

Go ahead and make yourself,

My suicide

 

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

God this is so sweet ,such a burst of emotions hidden inside
and he was the trigger to pull them out,its like a release
break me,pull down all those stupid defenses,and you could
with your magic words,with your breath so near ,heart beats so fast
i swoon,and let all in your hands,how sweet to surrender and into you
mind and imagination you captivate me,what grace what soul
i shed my skin bare and clothe you inside me..i tremble so weak
i shake all inside,push me want to fall hard ,want no pride
feel so vulnerable with you,used to hate,but not in your hands
so lovely and sweet
lovely write..

[alan khan]

had such a great flow. i really enjoyed this. nice work.

[Chirinos20]

wow, I like this poem a lot. It really describes what you want of that significant other. A see a lot of passion in your writes. thanks for sharing!!

Chirinos20

[Iota]

I love this poem as well, I don't know if I want to make myself anyone's suicide. Still this one had the nice beginning that kept growing and growing in strength. Excellent write.

[PoisonedFlower]

I love this--especially the ending! The entire poem flows really well and the last words wrap it up so well! Good job!

[An owl on the moon]

This is such a powerfully moving poem, full of depth and vision. There is at once a mix of life (captivate me with your imagination) and death (make yourself, my suicide)... which is perhaps the paradox of being alive. Amazing write!