Joys Erased

Joys Erased

A Poem by Khalil Jibran

Where the water slips on stones/
Where sound of waves touch the soul/
Where gardens of endless beauty bloom in sun/
Where thoughts of sorrow seem to run/
Where the cool breeze whistles in joy/
Where the colour of flowers my sight enjoys/
Where the moist grass gives me pleasure/
Where glowing flowers unleash their scent treasure/
I lie under a tree/
Where leaves sing me lullaby/
And when my eyes close there/
I fall deep into the layers/
And reach to a place/
Where sunrays hit my face/
On the bed of disgrace/
And suddenly all my joys erase/

© 2016 Khalil Jibran


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The beginning bit is quite nice; chock full of descriptive words and gives the reader a wonderful image of serenity but the lines ending in "tree", "lullaby", "there", and "layers" don't exactly have the same poetic prose and flow. The ending is also quite sudden and unexplained; why a bed of disgrace? Everything seemed so peaceful and calm lol.

Overall quite good for a first, but keep going! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Khalil Jibran

8 Years Ago

because it is just a dream and the reality is horrible..... my desires have turned into nightmares.... read more



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what is lullaby meaning in the dream

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Khalil Jibran

8 Years Ago

whistling sound of leaves caused by wind... which touches the soul.
All the times, imaginations are much more better than reality. So if a person, starts sucking happiness from imaginations, he gradually enjoys it and thus, does not face boredom or troubled life in reality...
Me too all the time write imaginative ones, very less about reality, which comes out from heart during memorable times...
Imaginations can flow all the times, its the benefit, advantage. Writing for reality needs a particular time and situation....
Good poem, liked it, specially the places used in imaginations are superb!!!
keep it up, hope you'll check out mine too...
Anindita

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The beginning bit is quite nice; chock full of descriptive words and gives the reader a wonderful image of serenity but the lines ending in "tree", "lullaby", "there", and "layers" don't exactly have the same poetic prose and flow. The ending is also quite sudden and unexplained; why a bed of disgrace? Everything seemed so peaceful and calm lol.

Overall quite good for a first, but keep going! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Khalil Jibran

8 Years Ago

because it is just a dream and the reality is horrible..... my desires have turned into nightmares.... read more
I really enjoyed this poem Khalil. The sensory images are solid, the tone and rhyming is spot on. It's amazing how we can be in an awesome place physically, but in a totally different place mentally, and vice versa.

Enjoyed this!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really dude? I don't know, I think I really might hate this place after all.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Khalil Jibran

8 Years Ago

did you like my writing??
Davidgeo

8 Years Ago

Eh... it's not horrible.

Who cares what I think though... keep writing....
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Added on April 20, 2016
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