Bouquet of Roses

appreciate little things you've received

                              Bouquet of Roses

                       A bouquet of roses he sent me,since we met.
                      All tenderly his messenger he chose;
                      Deep-hearted,pure with scented dew  still
                          wet------a bouquet of roses

                        I knew the language of the flowers,
                        "My fragile leaves"it said,
                        "his heart enclose"
                       Love long has taken for his amulet,
                           a bouquet of roses
         
                       Why is it no one ever sent me yet
                       One perfect limousine,do you suppose?
                       Ah no,its always just my luck to get,
                           a bouquet of roses

Author's Note

honest review please!!

Reviews

[Ahmad Cox]

Very sweet and lovely

[Jess]

:)thanks

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Wow I know women who have only received flowers like twice in their entire lives! The guys do it differently over there huh?

I liked this piece, it felt classical and sassy at the same time.

[Jess]

glad you liked it Sir Michael:))yeah he just kept on sending me a bouquet of roses from time to time..LOL.i think i could put up a flower shop...anyways thanks for the review.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I love giving flowers! It's something I take a lot of pride doing, choosing just the right sort of bouquet ;P

[Jess]

Oh really??how sweet of you;')

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Yeah and I'm pretty poor (so the girl doesn't always know the sacrifice on my budget lol)

[Frieda P]

lol, I love this, very cute write.

'just my luck to get a bouquet of roses'

funny stuff and very entertaining.

[Jess]

glad you loved it Madam F,,,:)thanks for the review

[CecilA]

Dear khicks,

Well here goes: honest review. I thoroughly love all of it except the last line. I don't believe that line. Why? The question - 'Why is it no one ever sent me yet one perfect limousine, do you suppose?' doesn't seem to connect with 'Ah no, it's always just my luck to get a bouquet of roses.' Instead, why didn't you ask - 'Why is it that he never sent me yet one perfect limousine, do you suppose?'

Suggestion: if you want to end your poem with a question, why not change the last line to - 'Why is it that he always sends a bouquet of roses instead?'

You made me believe that the rose giver is in love with you; just reluctant to advance to the next level of commitment. So we have your emotional disappointment expressed in your closing questions. I don't believe 'luck' has anything to do with it. It's something deeper than that. And I believe you feel the same way. I'm not convinced that you are happy with just the 'little things.' You want more - be honest. Let me feel the disappointment. That 'Bouquet of Roses' doesn't cut it does it?

Also you might want to consider using the present tense 'I know the language of flowers,'

Otherwise I believe it's a great poem and well written. Also as a guy, it sort of smarts. Food for thought.

It's very good khicks but I believe it can be great if you tell the truth. You don't have to believe a word of this. And that's all right. It's not criticism; just my interpretation.

Thank you for sharing this charming poem with us.

Sincerely, Cecil

[Jess]

thank you for your honest review CecilA:)I appreciate your thought and comment,,,I'll be honest next time,i just want "him" to know that i need something new more than a roses,,,,thank you so much!!!

[lee von cleef]

I saw a limousine.....long tall broad...white....first prize...a big impressive bull,
Lost? now your turn to Googal...Limousine.

[Jess]

thanks for the review:)

[chuna]

I remember the song "little things " by one direction,,,

we do not need a "bouquet of roses"
because what we need is love,love,love!

LOVE is much enough to give you mall in life!

"little things" must be appreciated!

[Jess]

thanks:)your right !!!we should appreciate little things we have and we received..

[Bound In Red]

Beautiful and defiantly reminds you to love the little things.

[Jess]

thanks:)