Mommy

I wrote this for all the moms including mine :)

Mommy

 

You’re always the shining star,

That would reach us wherever we are.

 

You’ve always been sleepless at night,

Just to see that we’re all sleeping so tight.

 

You carried us so gentle,

And swayed us until we settle.

 

You’ve given us everything that we need,

And it was all in the purest of love indeed.

 

I prayed for you always,

To stand up and keep a straight pace.

 

We’ve gone through hard times,

But there we no serious crimes.

 

You said everything’s gonna be okay,

But saying that won’t cure me in a day.

 

Now I’m sorry for the things that I did,

And I wrote this for you to be with.

 

We love you even the worst of your imperfections,

'Cause a daughter can’t stand alone without your corrections.

Author's Note

tell me what you think.. i know there's a lot of flaws in here somewhere..

Reviews

[Rene Velez]

it's a good poem, nothing really wrong at all, just a little short, poems like this should be a bit longer because people can relate so well to a mothers love, I would have added a bit more personal experiences to draw people in, experiences you alone had with your mom, the warmth of her skin, the beating of heart sleeping on her lap with your head on her chest, stuff like that...small pictures

[brenda]

this is gorgeous !!! i love it !!:)

[Becky C Strukamp]

A very tender poem. Well written. A lovely tribute to your mom and all moms!!

[Short.Nerd]

Very sweet!

Great job :)

[TheElfPrincess]

I loved this. It's so sweet. Well written

[maryjaneuy]

I love this Jhed! Very heart-felt poem. ;)
I didn't know you're still using your account here. Keep on writing! :)

[~ Moonlight ~]

I love this! So Deep-felt!! It really put me in that posistion.