Isolation

Isolation

 

Looking through the window pane,

Oblivious of the endless pain.

 

Watching couples as they walk together,

Wishing the story would last forever.

 

Hoping to have that happily ever after,

But sooner realizing the story will soon falter.

 

Fighting to revive that sad story,

Wishing you could’ve just said you’re sorry.

 

Time is passing and you want to move on,

You’re thinking it’s complicated but you’ve got no reason.

 

Now you’re feeling hatred inside your heart,

Imagining he’d cry with you in the dark.

 

But everything you thought didn’t fall to place,

You’re sick and tired running around that maze.

 

Now you stopped fighting for that sad story,

And now thanking you didn’t say you’re sorry.

Author's Note

Thanks to Kenneth the Geek for suggesting the title and so as to the others who suggested. You're all awesome!!! so there you have it. hope you like it! (oh, also tell me those wrong spelling and grammars!)

Reviews

[CharlesMonroe]

I think "Isolation Windows" would be cool, but I looove this poem, because I can really relate to it, and it's going into my favorites. I love the picture to, it fit in sooo perfectlly, it felt like you were litterally writing about that girl, because her body language and facial expressions fit in perfectlly eith your words. And I love it. Just amazing (:

[kdpgrahi]

A real poetic feeling. Always having hope for positives. A good write. I liked.

[TheRavenQueer]

Great write!! I really like this. I especially love these lines:

"Watching couples as they walk together,
Wishing the story would last forever."

Title ideas... I'm thinking "That Sad Story" or "Window Pane / Pain".
Well done! =)

[Coyote Poetry]

A lot of sad emotion and desire in your words. Sometime hard to say you are sorry. Sometime we need to learn to be better. A strong poem that open the doors to many questions. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

You Did Not Cry With Me...............nice piece, very nice.

[A Risen Heroine.]

nice write, I really like it.

I can't come up with a name... sorry

~A Fallen Heroine~

[TJ]

No good titles but this is an amazing write! I loved your format and presentation and your words were tragic yet beautiful

[Kathryn]

No idea as for a title, but I love this peice :) Beautifully written :) Well done :)

[Judas Hammer]

nice piece.... I enjoyed the read