We're Living in a Fantasy

We’re Living in a Fantasy

I’m standing in the center of the room

Reminiscing all the memories

As we watched and laughed under the moon

It kind of took me by surprise

As you held your hand with mine

Entwining each of our fingers

I look past your eyes

And felt a touch of lie

 

But baby

You know we’re living in a fantasy

You can see how my dreams are crashing down

Whenever I’m in your arms

Looking back at where we were before

And I’ll be

Kissing you goodbye until I finally breathe

‘Cause you know that I can’t even let you go

You know I’ll be back for more

And yeah I know, I know I’m in a fantasy

 

Standing one by one

I can feel you breathe

You took, grab and hold my hand

And escaped in the sea of people

Slowly, I let you fade away

‘Cause I feel, yeah I see

We shouldn’t be together

 

But baby

You know we’re living in a fantasy

You can see how my dreams are crashing down

Whenever I’m in your arms

Looking back at where we were before

And I’ll be

Kissing you goodbye until I finally breathe

‘Cause you know that I can’t even let you go

You know I’ll be back for more

And yeah I know, I know I’m in a fantasy

 

I know deep within

This is my reality

My precious reality

But someone tells me

“This is just a fantasy..”

I should wake up, wake up

And escape this fantasy

 

But baby

You know we’re living in a fantasy

You can see how my dreams are crashing down

Whenever I’m in your arms

Looking back at where we were before

And I’ll be

Kissing you goodbye until I finally breathe

‘Cause you know that I can’t even let you go

You know I’ll be back for more

And yeah I know, I know I’m in a fantasy

 

 

Author's Note

all suggestions accepted. I love reviews! i'll also do the favor!
yeah this is a song.. my first ever written song xD

Reviews

[ivizarx]

I enjoyed the poem overall, and it has lots of power and emotion settled in it I can definitely find. romance exaggerated, using emotions to give way for imagery. I really hate to say, but I was really lost in the flow of the poem, kinda hard to find rhythm for me, but that's purely perspective and it seems many others have accomplished finding the poems natural pace, so nevermind my criticism if you wish and take it with a grain of salt if you may. overall, still really found the poem well written and very appealing. enjoyed it :)

[realmwriter]

Well I fantasy is where Id like to be then because here aint the best place to be! Fantasy is mush happier because it can be what ever we want it to be dispite our decisions to the contrary in the real world!

[Richard Williams]

A good poem, well structured.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A proper poetic piece, well done, great read.

[Helpless]

this poem really put me in a fantasy world!

[joshua deathdealer]

Awesome first song. I love the flow as well as your choice of words.

[Rene Velez]

definitely music material, it sings, and a good song Jhed, props to you

[TJ]

Very melodic I could tell this was a song before I even read your note! Powerful words and imagery too ^_^

[brenda]

i like this song it is really great thats my review !:)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work, I think this would work as a song. It might be hard to key out though.