Me♥

I don't know really..ahaha.. :D

Me

 

Nobody knows me

Except for my friends

I can’t describe myself

In long words

Others thought I’m all stagy and girly

But I’m not

They say I’m loud

But I’m not

Some people came to know who I am

And what can I say?

I’m not as smart as them.

They always thought of the

Negative side

They never saw the real me

Because they base on the outside

And not on the inside

I’m serious though sometimes not

Sometimes I’m sophisticated

Some notice I’m pessimistic

And some say hopeful

I’m jovial everyday

And sometimes when you ask me

I’m forthright

I’m honest when it comes to serious talk

And sometimes lies came all along

I like how my friends treat me

And how we treat each other

I don’t like people making me feel

Guilty and stuff just because I made

One big mistake

Maybe just slap me the words

And I’ll make myself clear with the way

 

I can’t change it.

It’s just is.

That’s me

Maybe imitated,

But never been duplicated

Reviews

[KayDennyy!(:]

this is really good:) bravo bravo

[deeps]

I love the ending stanza. Brillant and wonderful.
Amazing write here.

[The Analog Kid]

Nice free-form poem from the heart.

[Coyote Poetry]

Each of us are built different. By good and bad in a life we become content or never able to find peace. The poem was very good. I like your story. Few people do we allow into our heart and mind. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[WriterSki7]

Seems you might have found another critic*

Albeit I am familiar in part with your writing style, I do believe you have room for great improvment. And sometimes, just sometimes; people on the outside can see parts of us we cannot.

I can't spell anything today ~_~

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

I believe Jhed writing is an art that comes from deep within. All you need to do is to be consistent in your style....which may change overtime...this is an excellent piece. I have not yet discovered the technique for judging emotions and feelings placed on paper. You have displayed this art...like all of us we learn on the way.....continue to express your feelings....continue to be true to the Art...we are all on the way..congratulations

[Thomas Fleet]

I happen to think you're a great writer, except you don't go through describing such complicated feelings and imagery. Instead, you keep it simple, which is what some poems nowadays need; simplicity. I liked the structure, it read well enough, and I got a feel of what you have felt.
You simply wrote down how you feel, which is what makes great poetry written off raw emotion.
Thanks for sharing.

[Camille Corbett]

Honestly, you're a horrible writer, however, I liked these two lines:
I’m honest when it comes to serious talk
And sometimes lies came all along
There were numerous errors and your diction is horrid, but those two lines showed promise with that glimmer of proper imagery, keep writing.

[Simple_mee]

Grand write. U're very right! Why change urself for others, That shud never be done !! :)