Left Behind

I'm alone and I happen to be left due to illness.. :(

Left Behind

 

I’m left behind.

No one to talk to

No one to walk by my side

No one to distract me

No one to hug me behind

 

You turned out to be one

One of the ‘in crowds’

One where I don’t belong

And the reason why you left

 

I pursued to get along with life

And yet, you’re still on my mind

I knew you’ll leave me behind

I didn’t have the guts,

The guts to trust myself

 

Life isn’t really fair

With God watching him as he goes away

And me, sitting there crying

Trying to change everything

But I can’t

I’m not a God to change everything

It’s just that

You mean more than anything

And now there’s one thing I really know

I’m all left behind.

Author's Note

What do you think? Well this was a fast write I don't know where it goes.. :D

Reviews

[WriterSki7]

Well done. While I might not share the same veiws of previous reveiwers, I believe constructive criticism (what people often call Negative Criticism) is far better than Positive criticism.

Albeit it might be hard to hear, Constructive criticism tells you how to become a better writer. Positive criticism does not. (Might have mis-spelled Criticism. Be warned, my mind doesn't always function like I want it to.)

[Thomas Fleet]

Well, fast write or not, it was a good one. It was an okay read, I liked it. The first stanza is great!

[Sexy P3nguin]

Don't listen to Nichole down there or above me idk. Anyway its a really good poem all around. Flow word choice everything is nice.

[Camille Corbett]

This has very bad mistakes, it made it almost nonsensical. Please edit your writings before showing people, it's quite disrespectful not to.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is sad and told a strong story. I like the flow and the pace of the words. Complete poem was very good. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Simple_mee]

It was a good write on the whole but i found it a lil bit repititive after every few sentences... Otherwise it was an enjoyable n a sad read...

[maryjaneuy]

very emotional. The ryhme scheme is a little bit confusing. The rhyming words are somewhat distant to one another.It's fairly good although some lines are far from the main topic. keep on writing.