Love

Love

A Poem by jhed
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for my friend Miguel, who requested me to write for him...

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Love

 

Stay here.

Don’t leave.

I love you.

Simple, joyous and fun

Words that make me like you.

I see your eyes light

Whenever you smile

I study your eyes

When you tell me lies

I frequently ask,

‘Do I deserve you?’

 

I knew my life is complete

When I’m with you

But should I be with you?

Should I stay with you?

I knew I can’t live without you.

Stay here.

Don’t go.

I’ll miss your loving lips

 

At night, I sleep

My dreams filled with joy and laughter

I always want to go after.

I heard myself whisper,

‘I can’t live without you,’

I hear your heart

Whenever you touch your lips to mine,

My heart jumped,

Trying to escape from my chest

 

You were the greatest treasure I received

That’s when I knew

I truly love you

I knew love chooses no one

And gladly as I receive you

I never rejected the gift

 

Your eyes stared at mine,

And slowly

I closed my eyes

As your lips searched mine

 

 

“It’s really hard to deal with love.”

            -jhed:)

 

“Never close your lips to those whom you have opened your heart.”

                        -Charles Dickens

© 2010 jhed


Author's Note

jhed
all suggestions are accepted..please tell me what to change..!!
thanks.
:)

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Very Corny

Posted 14 Years Ago


As usual, a well-written poem, albeit a bit repetative as Simple_Mee pointed out. Nice touch putting in the quotes at the bottom.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Don't change anything. it's great!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


Aww.. this is so sweet and passionate.. I'm sure it will touch your friend deeply. This was a nice, romantic writing of love.. The Charles Dickens quote was a nice addition although it's really not needed .. your words are great and classic all your own! Magnificent tribute to the one you love!

Posted 14 Years Ago


How lovely...
you make it sound so simple. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very light, easy flow. You speak of the things that we all have wrestled with in the "game of love." I hope Miguel like it:)

Patrick

Posted 14 Years Ago


Poem is beautiful. The flow and story was amazing. I like the quote of Charles Dickens. Your ending was perfect. You wrote a outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 14 Years Ago


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aww... haha.. Am sure Miguel loved this.. I think its very sweet you wrote this.. Its full of emotions !!

Posted 14 Years Ago


I loved ur poem! :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


It was certainly a remarkable write bu what I found a lil' out of place in this one was that u have repeated certain things time n time again.
For eg In this line U mention the lips...
"Don’t go.
I’ll miss your loving lips"

But again I see a repeat of something similar here,

"Whenever you touch your lips to mine,
My heart jumped,"
(ofcourse this is what I think, my judgement can be wrong too)
But oherwise the poem was very well written.. ;)




Posted 14 Years Ago



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jhed
jhed

manila, Philippines



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