The Temptations of the Sea

 

 

He sits in an isolation chamber

Filled with blank pages-

slobbering dogs waiting to be fed

 

their howls echo across the steel hull of his mind

yet all he hears are the sounds of the sea

,a seductive siren song,

and just beneath the surface the glimmer of life

carried by schools of fish.

 

Encased his heart cries out a thousand blasphemies-

like the lining up of his muses in front of a firing squad

the shots leaving pools of unwritten stanzas-

something to be cleaned by the deck hand later

 

still he stares out

from between the cracks

in hopes of glimpsing the sea

 

hoping that he can one day swim endlessly through its depths

and experience its endless wonders

 

but he is trapped within Plato’s looking glass

seeing only the shape of the world

but never enjoying its bittersweet taste

 

Author's Note

this is still very rough, feedback encouraged

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This is good. I liked the imagery. Thanks for sharing. :)

[deepshade]

i was a little lost on where he was but as i read through i was surprised and i must say its well done

[River Wilson]

This is really great

[Ruth]

The feeling of being trapped here is awesome! Overwhelming! You have done a great job here!
To reflect we all need to lock ourselves away at times, a wonderful poem
xx

[C]

Longing confinement as seen through a watery lens. I love those third and last paragraphs.

[.]

you have some wonderful lines here..to many to quote, a rough draft? I was impressed

[Bard Constantine]

Impressively creative... I loved the language, the metaphors you so effortlessly intertwine in this piece; that third stanza is amazing, and the ending resonates. Masterful work...

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Aww, that poor guy, he's trapped. I feel bad.

[Brad]

this is a deep, fathomless philisophical piece, can only be enjoyed with scuba gear

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you create the scene with deep effect~ emotives moving throughout gorgeous metaphorical word strings engaging thought and reflection~