Tangerine Moon

inspired by a drive early one night

Walking on a dream
Of butter-cream skies
And sugarplum fields
A Tangerine moon
Lies above

Beckoning with sweet drips

That only night creatures taste

Leaving all who live in daylight yearn-

For sunlight’s bitter edge
Purses lips and tightens skin-
leaving many red with anger
they seek shelter or the comfort of Verde Vera
who’s tendril fingers brush everywhere
releasing cold ecstatic vibrations
that echo through shattered pores

a sigh of relief escapes
but the sun’s bitter taste will return
inflamed by the brush of a shirt,
or the water from the shower head
leaving one paralyzed in sweaty snake sheets

till the night comes
and you slip into a dream
where you smell the sweet fragrance
of a  tangerine moon

and your mouth waters

Author's Note

feedback encouraged

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was unique. I liked it. Great job on the piece. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Nancy S.]

Abstract, unique, creative. wonderful picture accompaniment. vivid imagery, and sensory stimulants. all in all, a great write...

[master squiggles]

Great imagery, overall great poem. Keep writing poetry; you're exceptionally good at it.

[Hollow Man]

You know this is a fantastic poem, great story here. love that u weren't worried about rhyming or ne other limiting factor besides form. I'd like to see u get more personal though. I'm wanting for more concrete imagery from u. you are an amazing writer and i can see no limits if u just let ur mind take u where it wants to go

[C.P.]

I love the imagery and the way you words leave a real taste in your mouth and felling on your skin. You played with more than the sense of sight. I think as writers we for get we have more than 1 or two senses we have a magic 5! Needs polishing but is a fantastic and sensual start.

[Larry Dyson]

I love this ...everything about your rhyme and assimalie..(sp)..the visual image of the moon is exactly what you bring in words...keep writing these...

[Sharon]

Good one.

[Bard Constantine]

Writing should engage the senses, and this definitely does. Certain phrases were creative gems that stand out strongly, like 'sweaty snake sheets'... well written from start to finish.

[Leah Everett]

I love the description, and the originality of the poem! Excellent.

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

So descriptive...I love it! ;p