UNTITLED #5

UNTITLED #5

By: JB Murray © November 2010

 

 

 

 

JUMP

She says

It’s all the same

This winter wind

This fading flame

 

LIE

She taunts

And laugh aloud

Play pretend

With all your clowns

 

SEE

She speaks

With open mind

This lover’s dance

This thorny vine

 

FALL

She pleads

From your dark cloud

Leave hell behind

Let heaven surround

 

LOVE

She asks

With trembling lips

Only if you could

With this last breath

 

RUN

She screams

Go save yourself

From all of you

And no one else

 

Reviews

[Ishan Sadwelkar]

Are you kidding me? This is outstanding. Brilliant use of pauses.

[Ladysue]

This is so unique and creatively done. Flows beautifully. I enjoyed this...

[beautiful disaster]

This is absolutely one of my favorites. The way you this up the way it flows so gently off the tongue.......I love it

[darkgurl]

I really enjoyed this one, love the set up. Remarkable read.