Desolation

Tovli Ten contest... these words really dictated this poem... making me think of an old western setting, where the hero is dragging himself through hell on one last dying breath. This was challenging

DESOLATION

 

 

Desolate

These birds of prey

Circling the drain

 

A face in shadows

Above the grave

This decaying trough

 

He crawled through

Hell’s oceans brimming

On this, his last breath

 

Only dead truly sleep

In these outer limits

Eyes fade gray

 

Author's Note

This was a tough one... the words supplied for this contest were quite challenging.. hope you enjoy!

Reviews

[Tovli]

very nice. loved the flow, the space, the words caught and cemented just where they should be. nicely done.

[beautiful disaster]

I like these 10 words that you write. They may be challenging but they make for a great read!

[EmpressPoetess]

I agree, JB, very challenging, but you've pulled it off very well with this one!

[Helen Crutchett]

You hit the contest head on with this fantastic poem. It was very challenging indeed, especially just writing 40 words as well. Thank you for sharing!